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A Northern Love Song

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Hi all. This is the first poem I've posted on the blog and I hope you like it. It's written about the moors above Haworth in West Yorkshire.  The photo is from those very same moors.

I haven't been writing poetry for long - about sixteen months, so I hope you like it.

A Northern Love Song


I hear the wild lands,
the rough lands,
the bleak lands.
Those harsh, north wind lands
where the curlew’s cry
is swallowed up,
in the vast, empty hugeness
of the great, grey sky.


I see the heather lands,
the bog lands,
sparse grass lands.
Those barren, dry stone wall lands
where, hardy sheep
seek shelter,
from wind
and rain and sleet.


I feel those driving weather lands,
my back against the storm.
We cannot conquer these lands,
and call them all our own.
This gritty harshness
with all her iron force,
has moulded man
since time began
and forged our very form.

Aunt Win (nie) ►

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Jane C. Steele

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 22:55

Stu and Ray, M.C and Graham
thank you very much for the positive feedback. It's always heartening to read someone actually 'likes' your work, besides your partner, Mum and the dog.
This is one of the earlier poems I wrote after driving over to Hebden Bridge and being struck speechless by the wilderness and desolate beauty of the moors. It gets me every time.
Cheers Jx

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Stu Buck

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 20:08

yeah i mean this is excellent, i spent a lot of my youth on the various moors of yorkshire and this is wonderfully evocative and beautifully written.

colour me impressed.

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raypool

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 20:02

First off Jan i'm delighted that you picked up on my poem The Autobiographies of the Famous, thank you for that. I was impressed with this work for its very distinct feel for rhythm and form. As Graham says the repetition of lands works so well. It also betokens a love of place which gives strength to the concept - there is a wildness brought to mind.

Welcome on site.

Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 15:42

I enjoyed the theme and the style...reminding me of the
Manley-Hopkins approach to the land. As a disciplie of
rhythm and verse I appreciate the variations that can
be employed but sometimes wonder why accasional
lapses in rhyme occur when they don't seem necessary.
That said, this is a quality introduction to this writer's
work and "feeling" for the subject. More please.

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Jane C. Steele

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 15:16

I changed the last stanza because the direction of the poem changed. I'm not describing the moors in a visual sense any more - but in a more abstract way. I wanted the cadence of the poem to alter to reflect this.
Thanks for reading and commenting. Jx

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 3rd Aug 2017 14:25

This is a very sound opener Jane.
I like the quadruple repetition of lands and wonder why you abandon it in the last verse.
Look forward to reading some more.

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