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Tramping

I idly brush the grass like heads

With the palm of my hand as I walk by

Feeling the feathery skin

Of unripened barley ears

Reach my fingertips

Midges busily play under large oaks

As I walk along the edge of fields

Of hard baked clay

In the summer heat

Trying to avoid falling in the ruts left by tractors

And horse’s hooves

My pullover tied

In a knot around my waist

 

The back of my neck burning red

I kick the dust and watch it fly

Then pick a long green grass shoot

And plant it in my mouth to chew

Letting it hang down

From between my teeth

Long ago I had given up

placing a blade of grass

Between my thumbs

to let out the farting rasping sound

that I found I cannot produce or the

High pitch whine which is every schoolboys

Well-rehearsed party trick

I turn my attention instead to the search

For a likely stick that will become a rapier

Or a sword

Which can usefully be employed

To beat down stinging nettles

Or take the heads of buttercups and daisies

In one stroke

 

I arrive home

And I am hot and tired my feet red and sore

A blister has formed were my sock

Has rubbed against the inside of my bumper boot

Under a toe

Despite parental warnings

I burst it

And watch the watery substance ooze out

As I sit on the floor

Tired but satisfied

With the days tramp

Along dusty shaded lanes

And broken stubbled fields of rich intent

Where with my trusty sword

Hard battles had been fought and won

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Jon

Tue 21st Nov 2017 08:17

Another fabulous poem Martin! Reminds me of happy times when I was younger, walking through local fields and woods, my weapon of choice being a bulrush which I imagined to be a mighty spear.
I've read this through a few times. A lovely read mate.

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Martin Elder

Fri 27th Oct 2017 23:32

Thanks very much Stu. Much appreciated . I had thought about reading it loud but I think you are probably right.
Cheers

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Stu Buck

Wed 25th Oct 2017 07:12

great imagery martin and a beautiful recollection. bet this sounds excellent live.

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Martin Elder

Tue 24th Oct 2017 22:58

Thanks Emer and Malika for liking and Thanks to Colin, Lan Ray and David for commenting

Glad you appreciated it Col it does in fact have memories of the south Downs as well as other parts of Sussex near my Gran's house just outside of Burgess Hill for me. I still like to go on the downs when I can if I get the opportunity to visit my mum.
yeah Lan
I am afraid I could never leave those blisters alone. If I am honest I still can't!
Ray I am glad you liked it . You are right I do seem to be rather caught up with the past and my boyhood at the moment
Thanks for your reading and comments David it is always a pleasure to get comments from yourself as well as all the other fine poets who are listed below.

Thank you all once again I am humbled by your acceptance of my work

Martin

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raypool

Mon 23rd Oct 2017 22:48

A sort of eulogy on a past youth with its frustrations and expectations, and the heat adds flavour to those surly feelings. You seem to be a master of this retrospective stuff Martin, and we all love it. It gives us something to cling onto.

Ray

Lan

Mon 23rd Oct 2017 10:36

Such great images - love this. I so remember the satisfaction of bursting blisters, well worth the discomfort ?

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Mon 23rd Oct 2017 08:58

*let's out sigh of deep satisfaction* You had me tramping the fields and footpaths of the South Downs above Shoreham with this one Martin.

It's a beautiful poem of the man retracing the footsteps of the boy and the farting rasping blade of grass between the thumbs is just pure joyfulness. I still do it and it still gives me great satisfaction to control the vibration from fart to high pitched scream.

Great stuff in every line, you know how to put a smile on this boy's face. Cheers, Col.

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