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Evacuees

Evacuees

 

From packed railway trains

they stumbled along country lanes

Clutching their gas masks and cases

often stooping to tie their laces

 

Strange faces peered from behind a net curtain

with glances that were quite uncertain

The billeting officer was highly officious

and the children somewhat mischievous

 

All were found a place to stay

because their homes were far away

The war had uprooted the whole nation

and many had found themselves at the railway station

 

Free from bombs and explosions

they sat on sofas with huge cushions

No one knew of the war´s duration

but it had caused a lot of commotion

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keith jeffries

Thu 3rd May 2018 18:35

Stu & Hazel,
Thank you for your comments which are much appreciated. Ray was right Hazel as it does lack an ending, a setting to add more character to it.
Keith

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Stu Buck

Thu 3rd May 2018 14:05

lovely stuff keith, a real sense of place and time captured well.

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Hazel ettridge

Thu 3rd May 2018 10:08

I agree with Ray about the last line. Maybe something to do with 'location? Would rhyme and scan better?
I love the summing up of the hugely emotionally complex experience of the evacuation of children in the line "They sat on sofas with huge cushions". That is such a touching image of comfort and safety in the midst of separation and danger.

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keith jeffries

Thu 3rd May 2018 08:46

Ray,
Thank you for your comment. Yes, you are right but I was lost for words or inspiration. Perhaps something will come along which I shall add. Thank you again. Keith

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raypool

Wed 2nd May 2018 22:35

A nice trip down memory lane, with no doubt a lot of people displaced, not so bad for the kids as for the parents I suppose. Life changing stuff and worthy of record Keith. With respect I would have liked a few lines at the end to round it off. Only my personal feeling !

Ray

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