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The Red Poncho

The Red Poncho

 

Would the lady in the red poncho come in please

 

She is bent almost double and pushes her shopping trolley

from head to foot she is dressed in red

The same outfit everyday without waver

I cannot estimate her age but well into the eighties

A red shawl, a heavy knitted poncho covers her frame

recently in its centre has appeared a hand knitted poppy

She wears dark glasses and walks apace

in the supermarket she makes slow progress

searching for bargains, two for the price of one

There is an air of self sufficiency about her

a woman of some strength and character

I know nothing about her not even her name

she seems to appear in town nearly everyday

It is the hand made poppy which catches the eye

worn for someone she knew or for all

I always say hello and she acknowledges me

her generation was schooled in good manners

Who, I think, will replace them?

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keith jeffries

Sat 10th Nov 2018 12:02

Kevin,

Thank you for your comment. I have found that absence has a way of highlighting changes. Being away for ten years and re entering British society I have noticed many different changes in various aspects of life and in particular attitudes. I don´t attribute manners or the lack thereof to any social class as that has no basis in fact. However, there seems to be a rural / urban divide on this issue. Towns are more cosomopolitan than ever before and the life style much more aggressive and faster. Whereas rural communities which are less cosmopolitan tend to be more relaxed and old habits die harder in these places. Close to where I live there is a small council housing estate the children of which are remarkably polite but I do not find their equivalent in the towns and cities. Perhaps a survey needs to be done. Thank you for raising this as confusion can result in prejudice and misinformation.

Keith

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kJ Walker

Fri 9th Nov 2018 21:31

I liked the imagery of this piece Keith. I could just picture the old lass. I think your concerns regarding good manners are unfounded. plenty of young people today have impeccable manners, in much the same way as lots of the older generation don't. I don't think manners has anything to do with age.
I found Brian's comment, suggesting class and good manners go hand in hand a bit offensive. (I could tell you what I really thought, but despite being a working class scum-bag I was brought up better than that)

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keith jeffries

Fri 9th Nov 2018 14:24

Taylor,

Thank you for your comment. Both yourself and Douglas are good examples of making valuable comments about how I have described the lady in question. I did not do so conciously but your comments have helped me realise how important it is to receive the comments of others.

Keith

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Taylor Crowshaw

Fri 9th Nov 2018 09:52

I particularly enjoyed the image of the old woman. I agree with Douglas you managed to breath life into her character. ?

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keith jeffries

Fri 9th Nov 2018 09:37

Brian and Doug,

Thank you for your comments which are much appreciated. Brian you raise a good point. Up until recently I lived in Spain and prior to returning to the UK I decided to live in a rural community instead of a city or large town for the very good reasons you have mentioned. I now live in a small town of 5000 poeple where people are polite and hospitable but a recent visit to a much larger town left me feeling a strong sense of dismay. I could not get the bus home fast enough. I was pushed and shoved as I have never experienced before.

Thank you both
Keith

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Thu 8th Nov 2018 23:15

Hi Keith - the last couple of lines caught my imagination and it does seem that old fashioned good manners is not very common these days, at least not in working class/lower middle class areas. I think in a more rural/gentile environment where the pace of life is slower you would still find the same old good behaviour.

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Douglas MacGowan

Thu 8th Nov 2018 20:12

You really bring this woman to life. I especially like the physical description that you don't give all at once - but add bits and pieces as the poem goes on.

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