haiku - jasmine
winds from shikoku
wild jasmine falls like pale clouds
settles on white hair
Comments
This seems to be the genuine article with what would seem to have a real sense of the far east.
Nice one Stu
thanks ray. glad you liked it. i have been reading a book on basho recently and got back in to haikus. also there is one as POTW so i figured i'd write a few and this was my favourite as i feel its ton e is closest to the traditional haiku themes.
A proper haiku that doesn't involve the first person like this is a treat for sore eyes, Stu. So persuasive in its simplicity.
Ray
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Stu Buck
Fri 1st Feb 2019 21:03
thanks very much martin. i had hoped to channel a bit of basho as i said below, i find haiku can become a bit self indulgent (i am as guilty as any of this) and wanted to write something slight and of a moment as he did.