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A DREAM OF MISFORTUNE

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A DREAM OF MISFORTUNE

 

I remember your father as

a friendly man who ate his meals

in the living room

with the huge cream fridge

 

but what was he doing

in my dreams a lifetime later

in the back of your car?

 

Shall we drop him here,

he said, or just keep driving?

It seems banal to say -

you drove me into the night.

 

I woke and you were very close

at least a lifetime ago,

ironing our mixed linen so carefully

 

the fridge full of melon and pig-meat,

those solid wooden shelves

stacked with all the books once read

before misfortune entered.

 

Before the world

had brought you me.

 

 

 

From my current collection: Those Ghosts.

 

 

 

 

 

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◄ BACARDI TAIL LIGHTS MACHINE GUN FAREWELL

SURVIVAL ►

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john short

Thu 24th Sep 2020 13:53

Hi Michael

Just noticed this. Thanks for your positive comments. Helpful as I'm considering if I should include this in a new pamphlet I'm finalising. I probably will now.

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Michael Triandam

Sat 5th Oct 2019 02:31

I love the way dreams blend elements of the past and we are left to give them meaning. You captured the dream so simply. I admit I would have tried to look for deeper truths if I had not read your comment, but as it was, I just enjoyed the physical experience of your poem. It flows so well.

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john short

Thu 9th May 2019 12:14

Thanks for your comments.

Nothing sinister just a dream about an old relationship that became too close for comfort. Perhaps some background is required. The fridge possibly a symbol of the family/ domestic security on offer.

John.

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jennifer Malden

Wed 8th May 2019 15:08

Am unable to write intelligent comments, so would just like to say I enjoyed this, and agree with Ray that it is gripping and rather unsettling.

Jennifer

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raypool

Wed 8th May 2019 11:17

Hi John, this is riveting stuff and quite claustrophic and unsettling. Is there a father figure dominating the relationship and coming back to haunt you - so it might seem. The juxtaposition of contrary ideas makes everything seem surreal.

Fascinating read !

Ray

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