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Sea Changes

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Milky opaline morning sky

smooth shimmering quicksilver sea.

Village on the point illuminated,

pink church and cream yellow houses

watercoloured by the first sunlight.

 

Then cobalt blue noonday bay

with glittering wave-tips diamond set.

duck-egg blue enamelled overhead,

white chiffon clouds haphazardly strewn.

 

Dull gunmetal water late afternoon

with wide sparkling hammered-silver sunpath

leading far out beyond the horizon.

Scaly mother-of-pearl cloud croccodile,

the village now just a flat grey cutout.

 

At evening a flaming copper sundisk,

invisible islands now magically summoned up.

Brilliant polished steel pool- surface

stabbed by murderous black shardlike shadows.

 

Then the so sudden day's end comes,

a midnight blue all enveloping dome

over dark dark slow moving water.

Three lonely stars lost in immensity,

only a smiling bright lemon yellow moon

friendly in this late autumn night.

 

 

 

 

 

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Don Matthews

Thu 3rd Oct 2019 16:35

Oh?.....watercolour's not a verb?....could've fooled me.....?

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jennifer Malden

Thu 3rd Oct 2019 16:19

thanks Adam W for the like, and Keith for the like and generous comment. Hope the sigh wasn't a sad one?! thanks Don for the comment - I thought someone would start complaining that watercolour isn't a verb!!! Glad you liked it Ray. It isn't really intentional that there are no people, although the ones that were there on the beach were mostly 'spoilt' - overweight women in totally inadequate bikinis and paunches for the men. I confess to not being slim, but at least I am altruistic enough to refuse to wear a bikini now!!!!!! There appears to be a dearth of mirrors in most houses.
Thanks again, Jennifer

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Adam Rabinowitz

Thu 3rd Oct 2019 00:53

Great descriptions and love the few friendly stars

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Don Matthews

Thu 3rd Oct 2019 00:03

Very well written (and observed) with so many good lines here Jennifer. I particularly like

'watercoloured by the first sunlight'.

Ray's comment 'A painting in words' is very true....

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raypool

Wed 2nd Oct 2019 22:28

Fabulous and engaging panorama of colour to take us when you want us to go Jennifer. And we do. It interests me that you have no people in the poem, and maybe that is a clue to your own appreciation of what may be unspoilt. Just a thought!

A painting in words.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Wed 2nd Oct 2019 22:01

A poem which took me there, to see and experience all that your pen wrote about and to sigh at the end of the day and at the end of the poem. A very descriptive piece of writng.
Thank you
Keith

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jennifer Malden

Wed 2nd Oct 2019 21:52

thanks Emilia and Adam. Jennifer

Emilia Callahan

Wed 2nd Oct 2019 20:28

Imagery is great!

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