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Family weekend

My poor little cup protests

its fourth dishwasher trip in two days.

Get it off your chest, small friend,

we are in this together,

this family weekend,

this vortex of demands,

this avalanche of requirements,

these days of the rumbling dishwasher

drowned out by shouting children.

This living photo-album,

blur of beloved faces,

this noise and love,

this eating and drinking,

this tension,

this joy.

 

After a mountain of toilet paper and teabags,

the inner shame of

the finishing line

being such blessed relief.

I place the cup back on the shelf.

It gives me a wink and a smile.

We know what we have done.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 9th Apr 2010 14:30

Wonderful poem, Dave, spot on in every way. And, yes, the personification of the teacup is super. How our minds do wander in weird ways in the middle of family mayhem! The last line is outstanding.

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John Coopey

Mon 5th Apr 2010 18:55

We haven't got grandkids yet Dave, but I can see the relief our parents when it's time to take our kids home.
Like Ray says, that's cool -the shame of the finishing line. Spot on!

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Ray Miller

Mon 5th Apr 2010 11:22

I thought this were great, especially "this living photo-album" and "the inner shame of the finishing line". I'm just off on a family camping holiday and even now I'm holding on to the vision of that finishing line.

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Isobel

Mon 5th Apr 2010 10:00

I love this one Dave. It sounds like everyday life in my house - except more often than not the dishwsher goes unstacked and the cup would rather spit at me.I won't comment on the toilet roll overly or it could spiral into another poem. Suffice to say that having lots of females in the house doesn't help.

The poem has a lightness of hand and something in it that anyone could identify with. Love the personification of the cup x

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Greg Freeman

Mon 5th Apr 2010 09:32

I take my mum home today!

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 5th Apr 2010 08:58

Made me smile! ;-)

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