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Carnival

In time of war, things fit to you tightly:

No bagginess, no slack, no loose surplus.

War exposes us as human beings,

And makes us face ourselves for what we are.

The carnival starts; you put on your mask

And chase the local girl. Later, waking,

You hear a distant cry from your old friend,

Pleading for your help through the gas and mud.

But you are too warm; she is beside you,

Keen as a whip. The cry melts into silence.

Next day comes the knock. Sad entertainers

Dance quietly around the carousel.

In the mirror, you see your guilty grin

Fall down backwards, to where no one hears you.

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Stephen Gospage

Sun 3rd Apr 2022 17:08

Thank you, John and Ray. I appreciate your comments very much. It is interesting that you highlight perplexity and dislocation in the poem. It was one of those poems which started out in one direction and finished up somewhere slightly different, so I suppose that those two words could also apply to the text itself.

And thanks to Rudyard, Pete, Holden and Leon for liking the poem.

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raypool

Sun 3rd Apr 2022 11:39

Excellent rough ride , great last two lines especially Stephen. There's a kind of dislocation throughout which i'm sure would be the reality of day to day uncertainty.

Ray

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John Botterill

Sat 2nd Apr 2022 22:59

You have summed up the perplexity and confusion many of us must feel in the face of the horror we are privy to nightly on the TV. A poem written, as usual, with great panache, Stephen. Thank you.

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