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MY MUMMY

It's my mummy's birthday today

a hundred and fifteen to be precise

but now she's passed away. 

Nineteen years have gone and time is moving on

but I can see her as sharp as a pin

I know she must be looking in. 

 

She never wanted to let me go

but had no option that much is clear,

that was the future I suppose

but today the clouds have parted and like the crescent moon

her face looks down on me

with a mirrored shine,

 

so happy birthday I say to her

to bridge the fateful gap

a trivial matter to most no doubt

but for me no less divine.

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raypool

Wed 6th Dec 2023 16:48

John, that's a big compliment to my writing - a poem from the heart and coincidental with her birthday and which dare I say she would have appreciated. Such thoughts are always ready to live again, and thanks for expressing that in your comment. Sorry for your loss - It is no easy thing to be left behind and that's the way it feels at the time....

Ray

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John Marks

Wed 6th Dec 2023 13:22

Ray. I've come back to your poem a few times now. It gets better - as all true poetry should. I lost my mam and dad within a year of each other recently so 'appen as I were in receptive mood. John

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raypool

Thu 2nd Nov 2023 17:13

Just coming back to you Michael as i'm afraid I let it slip. So nice of you to pay tribute to my efforts to express what you obviously share in spirit - I definitely do agree about the persistence of her influence, a reality for me and not a bit sad as she went nineteen years ago.

Ray

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Michael Morales

Mon 2nd Oct 2023 01:12

Beautiful bro I can resonate I too have lost my mom It’s very honorable of you too keep her name alive her spirit is guiding you for sure

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raypool

Sun 1st Oct 2023 22:26

Thanks for adding a like John.
Mark, if your younger family life was like mine, there was a lack of awareness of all but the close family circle, and often nothing happened on birthdays, and my Mum went along with the prevailing trend!

Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 30th Sep 2023 11:27

Over my long life, I've always been aware that the women in the
family have a greater commitment to such things than the men.
The latter really have no excuse(s) and resort to "leaving it to the
girls". - as if it was somehow a feminine thing to do and that
men were somehow absolved from any such caring aspect in
this life. Lazy and long on what is basically a "cop-out"!!

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raypool

Sat 30th Sep 2023 10:59

Thank you for the likes Stephen, Ferris and K. Lynn.

That's a nice coincidence Graham - same hymn sheet as they say! My wife is on the ball with all the family current occasions thank goodness, but I think we mostly remember our own close members don't we.

Most gratifying Helene that you clicked with this, thank you.

Ray

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Hélène

Thu 28th Sep 2023 20:57

Really lovely! Love the lines "I can see her as sharp as a pin, I know she must be looking in." Superb poem, Ray.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 28th Sep 2023 16:54

Very timely Ray! I still use a written diary and have only just (yesterday) transferred all my birthday and significant dates into it, including my father's and mothers birthdates and deaths. For personal consumption only!

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