Crisp within her vase
Dead red roses on display
Fragile in the light
Lack of sickly scent
Seeing beauty in decay
Brittleness deflects
Look but do not touch
Your fingers are forbidden
Petals turn to dust
Floral deviance
Delighting in senescence
Ring of rosy death
Terry White
Sat 25th Jun 2011 03:31
I love it.
Very fine poem, Laura. Fabulous detail and imagery. X
This is really good, Laura, a fine example of haiku. The whole series develops a theme, but each 'stanza' could stand alone, is wholly sufficient on to itself. I look forward to meeting you in Sale next Tuesday.
very sharp stuff, Laura.. lot of detail in a few words here.. impressive x
Hi Laura, what an interesting piece! Yes it is tagged haiku, Dave must have just missed it.
Floral deviance and beauty in decay wouldnt be my idea of a bunch of flowers, but after seeing the winning garden of the Chelsea flower show which looked just like the field across the road from me, who knows?
I like the spareness here which makes every word count. Clever title too!
Cate xx
Japanese? Interesting! Cheers Dave.
Err, it already IS tagged as a haiku. Is it not showing or something?
Any poem about a physical object which makes one really SEE and FEEL it is working well, and this does - vividly. But it's not just about the object, it's about the passing of time. It almost feels Japanese in the way that it expresses this.
Will you be tagging it as a haiku?
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<Deleted User> (8943)
Wed 20th Jul 2011 16:16
As a person who takes ages to throw away flowers, even after the petals have fallen off - I love this! "beauty in decay"