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Girl in a summer dress

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Girl in a summer dress

 

 

The park is tinder dry and brittle-bone,

wraith clouds wither in the Wedgewood blue

oblivious you lie there all alone

while all the world stops turning  – just for you.

Wandering pages of some other place

in leopard shade of genuflecting trees,

the lake strews shimmering diamonds on your face,

your wheat-field hair a sanctuary for the breeze.

The sun’s tongue licks the ice-cream of your skin

and strips you bare to silhouette and line;

an innocence inviting carnal sin

- enigma of all feminine design.

You’ve yet to learn the power of your spell;

to hold men, helpless, over heaven - and hell.

 

◄ Phoenix (re-posted by request)

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Ray Miller

Wed 13th Jul 2011 22:52

Nice poem, Anthony. I like "leopard shade". I thought "the lake..." was a bit long - the lake shimmers diamonds upon your face?
This is a lovely line:
your wheat-field hair a sanctuary for the breeze?
Though I'd prefer just "for breeze" lose "the".

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Isobel

Tue 12th Jul 2011 20:12

That's a different thing though - cuteness - it doesn't necessarily carry through to teens or early adulthood and it has nothing to do with sexuality. I'm quite sure my youngest will be an knock out beauty - she has all the ingredients - but will she see if for herself? I hope so - but not in an overly vain kind of way.

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Cate Greenlees

Tue 12th Jul 2011 20:01

Beautiful. Just beautiful. Not sure that I agree with you all over girls not being aware of their own magnetism though. Pretty girls are aware at an incredibly early age of how to use their looks to entice and enrapture. My gorgeous two year old grandaughter does it all the time, and I know Isobels youngest daughter is a past master at using her charm to wrap any unsuspecting male round her little finger!!
Cate xx

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John Coopey

Tue 12th Jul 2011 16:20

You didn't get her phone number, did you?

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John Coopey

Tue 12th Jul 2011 16:19

Classy, AE.
Wonderful imagery, sensual, constructed sonnet.
Love the "wheat-filled hair a sanctuary for the breeze" but so many other phrases to enjoy.
Also agree with Isabel about age = confidence. I've got to that time of life when I feel like I could invade Poland!

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Isobel

Sun 10th Jul 2011 22:51

p.s. confidence often comes with age so I suppose young girls are more likely to be unaware of their affect on men - though again that is a generalisation.

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Isobel

Sun 10th Jul 2011 22:46

What a lovely snapshot Anthony. Whilst others might gaze at hosts of golden daffodils, I see you are more drawn by young girls in summer dresses, silhouetted by the sun.... much more like the real world I think!

I love the flow of this - as Dave says - so well crafted.

To answer Philipos's question - 'are women aware of their own appeal?'. I would say that it depends on the woman and her level of self awareness and confidence. I think you have to like yourself before you can believe that anyone else does - or notice it even. And beauty can be very subjective...

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 10th Jul 2011 22:18

If only beautiful women knew what spells they weave

Philipos

Sun 10th Jul 2011 14:44

Well crafted Anthony - especially liked 'You’ve yet to learn the power of your spell; to hold men, helpless, over heaven - and hell.' But wonder if that is really true or whether gals do have an innate sense of their own appeal without necessarily being able to put it into words. Perhaps some are more aware of it than others eh? Wonder what others think.

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Dave Bradley

Sun 10th Jul 2011 07:55

As ever, a beautifully crafted poem with - as Francine says - rich imagery. For me, it raises questions about the 'spell', for example suggesting there is something going on which is more than just biology.

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Francine

Sun 10th Jul 2011 02:48

This is very sensuous with rich images that engages...
'genuflecting trees'
'enigma of all feminine design'

I personally would prefer something like ' The sun's glow melts the ice-cream of your skin' for that line. : )

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