LMF
You have seen broken, burning men
pulled from broken burning planes.
You have watched as bombers turn into fiery, flaming torches,
Lighting up the night, falling, falling, falling,
full of your friends,
so frightening.
You have seen the wrecked corpses
in wrecked machines.
You have prayed as a dozen searchlights catch you naked in their beam
as the flak creeps closer,
as hot metal shards ping and rattle on your deadly cage.
You have sweated as an engine cuts out,
as the pilot corkscrews away
from a ravenous, death-spitting night-fighter,
whose cannon shells burst the fuselage around you.
You have hidden the vomit, urine and tears
from the others, your brothers.
In the morning at breakfast,
you have counted the empty places,
and remembered the missing faces.
And today they say you have LMF.
Lack of moral fibre.
But what do they know?
Really, what do they know?
Elaine Booth
Tue 16th Aug 2011 13:25
Very powerful, Dave. The immediacy of the language realy packs a punch - shoots the reader right into the action. Very visceral:
"You have hidden the vomit, urine and tears". I do agree with Ray that perhaps you don't need the last 2 lines - it really is powerful enough and also wonder if you could lose the LMF and instead leave in the 3 words as a revelation of the meaning of the title? Just suggestions - it really is excellent. XX