Wave
So you're leaving this evening of August
in the silence succeeding sunset,
with the ocean spread open before us
and our skin superficially wet
from the splutters of sea which come splashing
on this sand which we briefly impress;
in the twilight the first star is flashing,
is it sending out signs of distress?
And is the day drowning or waving?
Has the night come to smooth or to smother?
August evening, my mind misbehaving,
I guess it takes time to recover;
from out of the blue which we bathe in
surface thoughts on the corpse of a lover.
Ray Miller
Tue 13th Dec 2011 20:17
Thanks for your comments. I'd not noticed the slight changes in the rhythm, Isobel.I do methodically edit and revise all my poems so I guess I lose sight of the original drift sometimes.