Giant brick-crunching machine chews building
rips hall
crushes stairs
folds up wall.
Bliss for a destructive man
busy and gleeful in his cabin
in his monster.
Sorrow and wonder
for a little boy
watching his school
vanish
before his wide eyes
his shocked and fascinated eyes.
Today his school has taught him a lesson.
Dave,
Couldn`t help latching on to the`fascinated`
in this...It reminded me of the satisfaction we used to feel as kids during the war knocking down the bits of wall that the Germans didn`t finish off. (next to finding a tin of biscuits in a bombed out shop - it was bliss.)...Honest, there is a kind of fascination in knocking down things...and as Anne says...?
A quiet nod to a loss of innocence; the realisation that nothing lasts forever. And, I
agree, the last line is well done!
<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 19th Feb 2012 19:42
When I watched my infant school torn down in sections..the little girl in me surfaced..so many things of my past being destroyed. Funny that I came to this today for I have had that very conversation about losing pieces of the past.chilly
<Deleted User> (5560)
Sun 19th Feb 2012 10:44
The poem comes from two perspectives, the boy and the demolition man. I really liked this poem. It is short,diverse, and to the point. The last line is absolutely inspired.
I like the ideas and the irony of that last line. I think you could have tinkered with the rest to make it sound more poetic.
the last line works really well here dave in particular but it's an excellent piece all round, buddy.
I'm wondering if this ever happened to you Dave? I bet most kids would be pleased to see their school come tumbling down! I like this - and its an unusual idea for a poem, which is always good to see.
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Tue 21st Feb 2012 12:04
Short and very powerful, a universal theme typified by this one event. You know the drill: 'from the part - the whole' regardless of what the subject is. And your ironic, perceptive last line is a hard-hitter.