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Billy Brown

Billy Brown, you're a rogue

With your wandering eyes

And your soft, lilting brogue

And your plausible sighs....

 

Billy Brown, there's no doubt

This I know, certain, sure

How I've felt many a clout

And I've dodged many more

 

From your big, heavy fist

When the drink made you mad -

Next day, sorry, you kissed

Me, repentant and sad

 

 

How I wish I could do

What's right: stop loving you.........................

 

 

 

 

 

 

◄ "To Thine Own Self"

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 28th Aug 2012 14:48

A tale of two fisties! Better for being terse and to the point. Great ending - tho' I might have gone for "and leave you". Purely a personal POV, you understand.
More please!

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 26th Aug 2012 18:26

Clever, as John say the understaterment is very effective and the way it ends so abruptly plays on the reader's emotions. Like it. xx

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John Coopey

Sat 25th Aug 2012 22:48

I like this, Dorinda. There's a lot going on the the poem which is stronger by being understated.

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