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The Shop of Days

He went to the returns counter

in the Shop of Days

and asked to bring back Tuesday.

It hadn't worked well.

He thought it had been oversold,

overpriced and over too soon. 

If they wouldn't take it back,

he would see

if days were obtainable elsewhere.

A place with a good returns policy

for the disappointed.

 

She went to the returns counter

in the Shop of Days 

and asked to bring back Thursday.

It had been rubbish.

It had done her head in.

There were no instructions. 

If they wouldn't take it back,

she would look

for a good no-win-no-fee lawyer.

One who would fight for justice 

for the disappointed.

 

He bumped into her at the returns counter

in the Shop of Days

and asked if she was doing anything

next Wednesday. 

Its strange how people meet

and are not disappointed. 

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Comments

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George Stanworth

Sun 19th Jan 2014 10:27

I really enjoyed this Dave. Loved the imagery, and the originality of it.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 17th Jan 2014 22:30

The imagination is working well here. One for
those "if only" days!

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 17th Jan 2014 19:28

I agree with Harry Dave - I meant to mention this last night but got caught up in packing away - I really like the concept and you delivered it in a very laid back and interesting way that kept me interested until the clever twist at the end. Very impressive stuff sir

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 17th Jan 2014 19:20


Dave,
When I heard this last night it made me think what a good hook the idea of a return counter for days would be for a round of satirical ones.

I particularly liked that:

`oversold, overpriced, and over too soon`

and

`If days were obtainable elsewhere`

It`s full of possibilities.

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John Coopey

Fri 17th Jan 2014 16:42

Very original, Dave. If you let me know where the store is I'd like to take back the last 40 years.

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winston plowes

Fri 17th Jan 2014 01:49

What an original idea Dave. I like Mondays personally :-)

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