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Nothing like love tastes so bitter in the morning

after burning all night in your embrace,

then learning my passion has been misplaced.

I am penned into my own situation comedy

with black permanent marker,

a slack smile with no laughter.

So I no longer quake, shake, rock or roll,

I am merged with dullness and deepest grey,

I am purged of useful words to say.

On the longest day I held out for something fine,

for love not in a modern style,

another way for a while.

Then I became valium coated

and now I am asleep in a dream,

alone I weep, inside I scream.

This is nothing like love-

This is nothing.

This is-

This.

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Isobel

Fri 11th Dec 2009 21:38

I'm just following Francine round when I should be doing some housework... Had to log in to comment on this - it so grabs you. I wonder just how many women could identify with this one? A wonderful poem Sian - it deals with an age old subject but grabs you like it was the first time... 'Holding out for something fine' doesn't seem like the modern way. Funnily enough I'm trying to write a poem about that at the moment - very different in style to this though and I'm not sure if I'll ever finish it - will let you know if I ever do. Thanks for this anyway. x

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Francine

Fri 11th Dec 2009 21:25

This is Fabulous Sian!

Can feel the pain and sadness...
'Then I became valium coated
and now I am asleep in a dream,
alone I weep, inside I scream.
This is nothing like love-'

Francine x

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 14th Apr 2009 10:50

Brilliant Sian, obviously if very sad, could really feel this. The last lines say it all, best wishes Jeff X

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Mon 6th Apr 2009 22:01

great piece of work Sian, so evocatively written and the last few lines leaves the their gasp of sadness with you. lovely x
(im not too great at commenting effectively)

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 1st Apr 2009 23:54

I am merged with dullness and deepest grey,
I am purged of useful words to say.

Worth the money for those two lines Sian. Time to look forward? Graham

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Mon 30th Mar 2009 18:22

beautiful and poignant I like the marker pen line too - great imagery. I agree sadness / grief reproduces the best poems.

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Steve Regan

Mon 30th Mar 2009 15:05

Hi Sian, sadness is not good when you live through it, but as the building stuff of poems it can produce poignant gems such as the one you've posted. 'This' is ...art.

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winston plowes

Mon 30th Mar 2009 12:48

Hi Sian
This is very sad. comments left on email.
Win x

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Noetic-fret!

Mon 30th Mar 2009 11:53

Hi Sian, I hope your well. This is a very touching poem. To me, it speaks of a disappointment that seems hard to escape from. As if your almost caught in some kind of trap. I hear ya.
Mike
x

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Mon 30th Mar 2009 11:51

Hi Sian,
good work.
" I am penned into my own situation comedy
with black permanent marker."
Great lines these i feel.

Janet.x

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alan barlow

Mon 30th Mar 2009 04:05

a telling tale of "usage" if you catch my meaning a true heart on sleeve piece i feel and a twang of guilt is intended for the appropriate reader, nice write sian just remember we arent all idiots ;-)
(most, but not all lol)

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