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ON THE MILLPOND BRIDGE

she waits for her lover on the millpond bridge

in the autumn sun on Michaelmas day

the waterwheel forever turning

caressing the river in its turbulent play.

 

      In a Tavistock tavern her lover lies

      in the arms of a drunken brazen whore.

      The golden sun engulfs the room

      their clothes lie strewn on the riven floor.

 

Lust explodes as his seed is spent

and no thought is spared for the millpond bridge

and still she waits and watches for him

for a silhouette on the distant ridge.

 

      The miller is watching his daughter there

      as the sun begins its lowering phase

      while the millwheel turns to grind the corn

      the shaft of light on the whitening haze.

 

The seed is pure the flour awaits

and he muses the way a father must

at his daughter's anxious poise as now

the hours pass and turn to dust.

 

      In the Tavistock tavern the lover stands

      wiping his mouth and buckling his belt

      and lays a guinea on the bed,

      she smiles and winks as the deal is dealt.

 

He knows not what she carries inside,

the blisters and the reddening flesh. 

 

The miller's daughter turns her head

to see her lover's shape enmesh

      with the setting sun at the millpond bridge.

      How sweet this meeting on Michaelmas day

      and she longs to touch his willing flesh,

      to give her aching body away.

◄ THE LONELY DRINKER

MISSISSIPI MUD PIE ►

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raypool

Fri 9th Oct 2015 14:36

Just to say everyone who commented, that I am encouraged and grateful for the inspiring attention paid to it. There'll be no stopping me now ( I hope).

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Laura Taylor

Fri 9th Oct 2015 13:58

Agree with the others - a fine story, poetically told. Nice work Ray!

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 8th Oct 2015 22:58

I like the lilt (and the shape) of it.


Maybe line 21 the lover rather than `he` (for clarity)

(pay me no notice)

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John Coopey

Thu 8th Oct 2015 22:23

The quality of this, Ray, is that it seems to evoke something for everyone. For me it's Alfred Noyes's The Highwayman.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 8th Oct 2015 16:21

Shades of Jeffrey Farnol (look him up if the name doesn't ring a bell). As a South Devon lad, I liked the lusty
aspect applied to Tavistock. Just as well the pub wasn't
in Lustleigh!!

<Deleted User> (8659)

Thu 8th Oct 2015 10:05

Enjoyed reading this one Ray, excellent story telling with images which spring to life.

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Stu Buck

Thu 8th Oct 2015 08:48

this is rather excellent. it reminds me of 'matty groves' by fairport convention. nice use of metaphor and a ripping yarn. and gratuitous use of the word seed. what more could you ask for.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 7th Oct 2015 22:20

love this Ray - I can hear Fairport Convention playing a lilting and mesmerising jig. I shall read again in the morning.

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