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Lost and found

He was quartering the field

up and down, down and up

gripping a metal detector

intent, determined, unwavering, bowed,

concentration etched into his face.

Watched by a woman leaning on the fence

impassive, silent

like him, in her fifties

waiting


They did not know I was watching

fascinated

to see what they would find

to see why it was important

to know more about this mysterious couple


After an hour, they exchanged their first brief words

He took a drink from her flask

silently, unsmiling

then plodded back to his task


I left the couple then,

my legs complaining at the long pause in their use

and took them off to the bilberries and heather


By chance I heard the end of the story

He was looking for his wedding ring

thrown in an unseeing rage.

And, extraordinary as it may seem,

he did find it.


What did he feel as the ring met his eyes?

Was it relief, was it the hunter's triumph?

Was it love, was it his Precious?

Was he glad to avoid the cost of replacement

of ring

or woman?

Did he think “found it quicker than last time” ?

Was he glad to put it on again?


What did she think, this sphinx of a spouse?

Was she glad, did she smile?

Did she say well done?

Did they hug, did they cry?

Did they say never again?

Were they happy?


I would like to think that they were happy.

◄ Attention spans

Why beach glass reminds me of Stan ►

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jane wilcock

Sun 16th Aug 2009 18:35

Hi, thanks for your comments, funny though as I almost commented on this poem on friday! Its just a brilliant story,very funny and I am sure has a happy ending!! I was transfixed. Jane

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Sat 15th Aug 2009 13:59

I enjoyed the story-line running through this too.
I love the philosophy of it too. It's amazing what comes to light when someone stops long enough to think, or even to imagine.
A very thought provoking poem.

Love it.
Janet.x

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 15th Aug 2009 13:23

Hi Dave,
Hope all is well with you, and thanks for comments on "Edge." I enjoyed your tale - and the implications of the possibilities of imagined continuations! Bilberries - my favourite, did you find some? A laborious task, but well worth it.
A hint of cynicism here:

Was he glad to avoid the cost of replacement

of ring

or woman?

But, like everyone else, I hope they lived happily ever after!

Regards,
A.E.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Aug 2009 10:27

Super poem, Dave. Loved it. Never dropped tension for a beat, and character development is superb. Enjoyed all the possibilities of 'the situation' offered and thus open to other personal inferences.

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winston plowes

Fri 14th Aug 2009 23:09

Nice tale Dave, carried me along nicely. Personally I hurled my wedding and engagement rings into a river. Metal detector no use in that case! Some Smeagal like character may find it one day perhaps although it is not as powerful as the 'one ring' (or is it) winston

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Cate Greenlees

Fri 14th Aug 2009 19:32

Orrrr wern`t you? Shame. I thought you were on your camping trip and philosophising about what was happening around you! Nice to meet you at the Tudor last night!
Cate xx

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Dave Bradley

Fri 14th Aug 2009 17:46

Thanks for commenting. The poem is based on an actual incident though I've elaborated. As one does (-;. For the avoidance of doubt I wasn't the bloke in the field

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Isobel

Fri 14th Aug 2009 17:11

Or was he sorry to find it? Fascinating story - I would like to think that they were happy too - is it a true story?

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Fri 14th Aug 2009 16:57

Interesting story, enjoyed the read.
Bernie

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