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Why beach glass reminds me of Stan

Stan could cut you

he was blunt, he was sharp

wasn't blind

he was strong, things were clear

in his mind,

his mouth-line grim

once,

as they say,

upon a time.

 

And once upon a time

an artery burst

and Stan was weak, and things grew dim

in his mind

almost blind

no longer blunt, no longer sharp

Brought down low

That's how it goes

 

But oh his wonderful smile, beaming

gentle warmth, our lives lightened

his patient good humour, glowing

at the children he once frightened

 

This beach glass could once cut you

it was edged, it was sharp

it was strong, it was clear

if you didn't mind

you would find

yourself with a blood-filled line

 

Not now.

 

Now it is worn, rounded, pitted,

scraped by a million grains of sand

battered by ten thousand waves

no threat to anyone

a thing to pick off the beach and smile

almost a stone

something warm to hold

and wonder at its story

 

Like Stan

cloudy now,

but with no edges

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Comments

Steve Smith

Tue 15th Sep 2009 09:05

Thanks for everything like the layer of image on story in this poem, and of course the emotion that is the regret of mortality.
Thanks for the lead out of the maze\!
Steve Smith

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Isobel

Fri 11th Sep 2009 06:34

Yep - everyone else has said it all. A picture drawn tenderly - I think we are all on a journey to being that stone.

steve mellor

Thu 10th Sep 2009 20:44

Evening Dave
Really enjoyed Stan's tale. 'something warm to hold'
Hopefully he'll be happy, and not stuck in one of my 'homes'
Steve M.

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Cate Greenlees

Thu 10th Sep 2009 17:15

Good one Dave. I agree with Janet...the comparison between the man and the stone is very cleverly drawn, and the warmth youve created for them both as being battered but with a new dimension in age is quite lovely.
Cate xx

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Thu 10th Sep 2009 12:50

I like this one Dave, i think we all know a Stan in life. A good analogy to cut glass, or beach glass in this case. :-)

Janet.x

<Deleted User> (6484)

Thu 10th Sep 2009 12:11

A very good story, well written and flows well.
Bernie

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