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THE LOVERS

She laughs.

Enthusiastically,

and a second or two too long.

she wears a top by Versace

And has Raybans on her head.

The man is older

and looks like money;

wants to look like money.

She looks at him

over her empty latte;

always at him.

he looks at the rest of us.

They are in love;

she with his money,

he with himself.

 

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John Coopey

Mon 12th Sep 2016 16:43

Thankyou, Estelle. It didn't much perception on my part. I just wrote what I saw.

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Estelle Haward

Mon 12th Sep 2016 12:22

Such a true and sad picture of a reality of today. Well penned. I like the lines "the looks at him, over her empty latte".

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John Coopey

Sun 11th Sep 2016 23:51

Thanks Stu. You flatter me. It was just a bit of luck I was there to report what I saw.

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Stu Buck

Sun 11th Sep 2016 13:04

really good. how adeptly (and infuriatingly) you turn your pen from comedy to humanity.

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John Coopey

Sat 10th Sep 2016 15:39

Thanks, guys. I watched them at a beach-front bistro in Bournemouth yesterday.

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raypool

Sat 10th Sep 2016 15:38

This is wonderful and grotesque in a sense because of the implication that money talks. It feels like worship instead of love, a circle of ego serving.
Just for the record, I owned a pair of Raybans (got cheap by a friend with contacts in the trade) and I experienced no spin - offs!

Really excellent stuff. Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 10th Sep 2016 15:06

She's his sugar
He's her daddy!
It certainly works for some.

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Trevor Alexander

Sat 10th Sep 2016 14:34

Well set up, and excellent denouement! Love it.

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 10th Sep 2016 11:05

John,
Summingly succinct, that killer last three lines.

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