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the eight fifty eight

will be late again,

the customers late

for their dates again.

The nine thirteen

would be running today

but due to staff shortages

was cancelled anyway.

Someone stepped out

being tired of life

so Salisbury station

will suffer delays

but the six fifteen

will arrive on time

and for that we must draw

some satisfaction.

      None of our trains

      have come  off the rails

      and that's important

      when all else fails.

Talks with the RMT are ongoing

backed up by ACAS

who never will take us

for a ride

and there's room for

one more standing inside

the six o five from Billericay

though it's overcrowded

and it's progress sticky

the disgruntled driver

has taken it hostage

and is forming a plan

for an all night sit in

and an overtime ban.

🌷(5)

◄ HYPOCHONDRIA THE LIBERTINE

THE CAVE IN THE SIDE OF A CLIFF ►

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raypool

Tue 21st Feb 2017 22:51

Hi Stu and Mark. Your slightly delayed comments are a worthy irony in view of the subject matter (just joking). It's lovely to get them of course. Stu, I recall you mentioning that band before . I'll check out their material for an update!
Mark, yes it must be infuriating for passengers (now called customers) when you can't supply their needs . Feels like someone's got someone by the balls.

Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 21st Feb 2017 18:02

I enjoy any poem that has an affinity with railways. This
is no exception, especially for its "take" on the unions
and their activities. And those last lines are tops for
catching the occasional lunacy of what goes on.

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Stu Buck

Tue 21st Feb 2017 11:14

lovely stuff ray, a bit like a half man half biscuit lyric if i do say so.

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raypool

Mon 20th Feb 2017 12:29

Thanks all for your thoughts and comments.
Paul, fulsome praise goes a long way! I like to poke fun at the barminess of the world with some of my own. Glad you enjoyed it. Ay.......

Colin, your imagination, impressive and on the way to a children's poem already! Thanks.

Greg, Very pithy and apt ! Better to read than to travel at the moment.

Harry, you pose a really salient point with your comment. Obviously it's all gone beyond a joke and this grand gesture you suggest could well take hold : phone Boris right away for the right away. As you know, there were such things as railcars!

Suki, Thanks for taking the mythical ride.

Ray love to all.

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suki spangles

Mon 20th Feb 2017 09:33

Flows smoothly, unlike your trains!

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 19th Feb 2017 19:42

Ray,
about those last six lines of this...As an ex union negotiator I`m a little bit mystified by the intransigence of the rail unions about the present upset...I keep getting the feeling that there is something deeper involved.

I sometimes wonder if there is something in the offing...
for instance: there is much talk of driver-less cars around
and - given the congestion on the road - the mind boggles at the mere possibility....But given that trains run on very
predictable rails on predictable routes at predictable times -
they would seem (in this age of the data revolution) that they could be prime candidates for the driverless transport
age...I wonder?

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Greg Freeman

Sun 19th Feb 2017 10:23

Enjoyed this one very much, Ray. Rattles along, even if the trains don't.

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Sun 19th Feb 2017 09:15

excellent, spot on Ray and ditto Paul's comments. Every time I see ASLEF's Tosh McDonald I think ASLAN in The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe.

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Paul Waring

Sun 19th Feb 2017 00:08

Ray, another imaginative piece written with your customary panache. I know I've said it before but, for me, you have a such a unique ability for capturing quintessential aspects of British life....again, very enjoyable.

Aythangyow2

Paul

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