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BIRDMAN

The birdman has news

fresh spirals of air sweep through his thoughts

his declination to fresh pastures set

aloft

 

black fluttering crowds

follow his name

decisive in supported flux.

 

The news travels fast

what is left behind is stored

in subtle energy, collectively

aloft

 

and what beauty follows!

swifts and swallows

fanning out like a courtier's cloak.

 

The pitch may vary

of winged thought

from stern to bow

through sky's watery dream

 

to follow the curve of the earth

the birdman hears the news

his blind cabin is set firm,

night creatures begin to stir

with palp and prey.

🌷(3)

◄ SILVERSIDES v CHARRINGTON

MOTHER'S RUIN ►

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raypool

Thu 15th Jun 2017 21:44

Thanks so much Tom Martin Colin Stu and Suki for all your appreciation. I thought I would try something a bit mysterious this time. The idea of a man/bird came to me, then I took it from there. I used swifts and swallows mainly for the alliteration. Again the stern to bow was the formation front and back .

Love to all. Ray

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Tom Harding

Thu 15th Jun 2017 00:21

lovely airy, mystique to this ray. enjoyed very much.

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suki spangles

Wed 14th Jun 2017 23:37

Ray, deep stuff indeed. Your reading makes this poem all the more evocative.

"and what beauty follows" ~ indeed:

swifts and swallows
fanning out like a courtier's cloak.


Suki

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Stu Buck

Wed 14th Jun 2017 13:23

really interesting ray. love it. needs re-reading and digesting, great stuff.

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Wed 14th Jun 2017 07:40

intriguing Ray, arresting and thought provoking in its imagery - as if written from a distant place of the mind or being. Thanks for posting, Col.

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Martin Elder

Tue 13th Jun 2017 23:25

There is some beautiful description here Ray. I particularly like the fifth stanza.
Nice one

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