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Hopes and Dreams

These shamans with their second sight

might tell you they are guided-

by misted past lives,

future spirits,

a distant queen,

a prophet....

or two.

They will wring their hands,

face the awful agony of clairvoyance-

annoyance and blessing they say,

heads shaking

with the pain of it all.

 

Cross my palm-

for the next hour

on my carousel of wonder

you will sit-

and in a bit

I will tell you what you want to know,

or what I want to tell you.

I will be specifically mysterious,

directly bewildering.

Leave you stunned

by forecast of fortune

and visions yet to be.

 

When you leave,

you will want more-

for I am a master

caster of hopes and dreams.

You are lost

but I will find you-

lead you to the answer.

Come with me

up the garden path,

we'll dance together-

you and I-

away with the fairies.

 

 

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:29

Wonderful bit of writing Sian, nice one Jeff x

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Cate Greenlees

Tue 24th Nov 2009 12:44

Cleverly written. Im not sure I agree with it cos Im of the opinion as Shakespeare so aptly puts it "There are more things in heaven and earth, Horatio,
Than are dreamt of in your philosophy." But as a warning against charlatans this is an excellent wake up call!
Cate xx

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Steve Regan

Tue 24th Nov 2009 11:41

A nice (piss) take of mystical charlatans and New Age tossers, Sian. Well that's how I read this anyway!
This is a good phrase
"guided-
by misted past lives,"
and this
"specifically mysterious"
and what a neat last line!

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Dave Bradley

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 22:35

Yup. Agree with the other comments. Free verse is difficult but this is a sure-footed excursion through its hazards.

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Isobel

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 15:40

Yep - I think you've hit the nail on the head with this one Sian - it certainly didn't work for Lady Di, did it? A very different style but similar sentiment to one that Admin Paul posted a few months back. The title makes me wonder whether you are questioning more than fortune tellers in this poem though....A well crafted poem. x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 14:49

Brilliant - a master pen. All good poets are cynics: cynicism is what keeps our eye clear and our poetic force fighting for truths.

darren thomas

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 12:29

I sort of saw you writing something like this!

I agree with Graham. A layer of some sort appears to be have been peeled from your writing. Save this skin, but work with what your current senses are telling you.

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Francine

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 01:46

Yes...
You have described the experience well.

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Sun 22nd Nov 2009 23:55

I take it you don't want me to do a Tarrot reading for you then ;-)) Enjoyed the poem.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 22nd Nov 2009 22:20

A new cynical style is evolving here I see. It's more plainspoken than your other work and tougher, that's good, another side to your sentiment. So good to be seeing more of you in all ways, presence and content. Well done again.

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winston plowes

Sun 22nd Nov 2009 20:27

Very True Sian. Win x

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