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ALWAYS ON THE ROAD

I was always on the road,

on the road through different towns,

through endless routes from A to B

and B to C and back to A

tight lipped in automobilitic flight,

on lonely motorways,

struggling to stay awake,

the long hard lights hypnotising me,

 

and sometimes, often, there would be

a stretch of houses in intimate night

eyeless uncharacteristic blocks

whose sleeping ones knew nothing

of me within my metal box.

 

I often wondered about those souls,

of how I would never see them 

nor sense within their beating bodies

the dreams, while I survived those flights

and went from A to B,

and B to C

and back to A again. 

 

 

 

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raypool

Tue 12th Jun 2018 21:36

An interesting take Hannah, thanks. Those inside and those outside each aware but without ever meeting. Seems kinda sad. Now I've stopped doing the long journeys it seemed almost inconceivable . Age creeping on too!

Ray

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Mon 11th Jun 2018 14:11

Sometimes in the night I hear the traffic going by and I think, where are they going?
Travelling all night.
This poem is so full of atmosphere and thought.
Being outside, looking in on those that appear cosy and settled.
Great work.

Hannah

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raypool

Sun 10th Jun 2018 19:26

It's kind of you David , many times it was a lonely venture; at other times there were other musos on board, always asleep . That's trust for you. I love the clip thanks. You had to be there! Sadly my audiences were often of the past it variety.

That's quite evocative in itself, Mark. Did you have a bullseye torch and a short cape? No I didn't think so. - no disrespect. That is such a good parallel situation too.

Thanks for your appreciation Keith!

Thanks Stu. Nice to get you back - I ask nothing more.

Absolutely apt, Suki. Much appreciated.

Thank you Frances, I made that word up I think - sometimes it pays to bend the rules.

Don't get me going with your imagination Col. We know what we mean! Film noir - it was always a Volvo for me. Rear wheel drive had a reassuring feel.

Hi Martin. I actually used to manage up to about 200 miles after a gig without a break. Desperate to get home!
No wonder I went barmy.

Brian, Anya, Darren and Andrew, i'm thrilled to get the likes.

Love to all you wollers(thanks Col).


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Martin Elder

Sun 10th Jun 2018 15:17

This is wonderfully written Ray, you had me visualising being with you all the way with this. It must have been so difficult to stay awake.
a great poem love it

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Sat 9th Jun 2018 21:34

a black and white movie of a poem Ray full of atmosphere - street lights and rain washed tarmac, the driver struggling to stay awake. Throw in a few flashbacks and the plot automatically thickens and the pulse races . . . Noice one guv' . . .

Frances Macaulay Forde

Sat 9th Jun 2018 12:18

What an amazing line; "tight lipped in automobilitic flight,"
the whole poem is contained in that amazing line.
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suki spangles

Sat 9th Jun 2018 01:50

Hi Ray,

A gem!

This is like a gentler version of this. Lyrics below the video:

https://youtu.be/1FtVR7gdp5c

Hope this makes you smile; you probably empathise with the sentiments more than most.

Also, thanks for your kind comment on my most recent offering here. Humbled.

Take care,
Suki

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Stu Buck

Fri 8th Jun 2018 19:24

reminds me a bit of the opening monologue from fight club ray, he is bemoaning the same sort of thing.

i travelled with you as i read this. what more can you ask for?

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keith jeffries

Fri 8th Jun 2018 07:58

Good Morning Ray,
You are certainly going through an inspirational period. I can well relate to this poem especially the second stanza, the last two lines of which are well expressed. Thank you for this.
Keith

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 8th Jun 2018 03:43

Know the feeling - or something similar. Used to experience
it on a 1960s Isle of Dogs street at 4am in the morning
when the whole world except me seemed to be asleep...unaware and uncaring of my presence on its behalf.

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