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Hope Ain't Gonna Float

Hope Ain't Gonna Float

 

Sadness drapes your shoulders like a well worn coat
Feet dragging heavily no hope to float.

 

An empty house once full of laughter and light.
Welcomed you home as you returned each night.

 

Now darkness greets you as you reach that door.
No more light no warmth any more.
The aroma of cooking once such a normality
Lacking in your life is now your reality.

 

Slumped in your chair you stare at the blank screen.
So many nights held in your arms, her favourite movies seen.

 

A microwave dinner..milk before bed.
You lay staring at the pillow were she once laid her head.
A tear trickles silently before you drift away.
Praying that you won't have to greet another day.

 

The dawn arrives quickly, too quickly for you.
Family arrive, all chatter and try to cheer you on.
You smile but inside you want to be gone.
As you wave and smile you close the door.
No hope to be found here any more.

 

Whisky glass in hand you drift into slumber.
A dream of days past too many to number.
You wake with a start to be greeted by the dark.
To a silence so deafening you cover your ears.
Then cover your eyes now flowing with tears.

 

You dance all alone to her favourite tune.
Swaying slowly to the light of the moon.
Your whiskey glass sits empty alone on the bar.
One final goodbye one final hurrah.

 

No more lonely nights filled with endless sorrow.
For you my dear friend there will be no tomorrow.

 

© 2018 Taylor Crowshaw

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Hugh

Tue 7th Aug 2018 07:48

Another masterpiece Taylor made.

<Deleted User> (19913)

Mon 6th Aug 2018 21:23

Wow, you've told a sad tale so beautifully, it's like the words reached out to me. Big Sal's right, there was something cinematic about this piece.

<Deleted User> (19836)

Mon 6th Aug 2018 20:22

Bravo! not once, not twice... but thrice! ?

Big Sal

Mon 6th Aug 2018 15:12

This is my favorite piece of yours that you have written so far. . .

Man not enough good to say. . The setting of the scene is increasingly noir-like as it wears on to its second and following stanzas. The pitch-perfect tone of the poem carries it through some rough patches of emotion as the reader scrambles to hope for the best, but ends up expecting the worse. It reads like a cinematic marvel that we watch a hundred times hoping to change the ending, but somehow by the end of it once again, we simply relish the opportunity to stay and see such a legend come to screen.

Hope that sums up my thoughts pretty well, I may feel inclined to come back, read it some more, and comment again if I haphazardly come up with something else good to say later on in the day. You did really well with this one.

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Don Matthews

Mon 6th Aug 2018 13:03

Rhyme delivering sadness. Well done Taylor ?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 6th Aug 2018 12:12

Correct M.C. darn that predictive text. I work solely from my phone..already corrected it once from defeated..Lol thanks for pointing it out much appreciated and amended.

Thank you for your comments..? x

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 6th Aug 2018 11:15

Heartwrenching in its content - and intent! With a pay-off that lingers. Clearly from the heart.
P.S. Isn't "defeaning" actually "deafening"? Just asking.

<Deleted User> (9882)

Mon 6th Aug 2018 10:58

a beaut Taylor!





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