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I am watching the dancing winds

turn the tumbling diamonds

of snow.

Crystals of down

float to the earth.

Crystals turn to tears as they fall

onto panes of longing glass.

Glass that saps the warmth

from my outstretched palms.

The East winds breathe snowstorms

turning shadows of trees to ghosts

and I wonder where you are.

I cannot feel you moving.

I cannot hear your thoughts,

are you so lost again

to me?

I know that though your body

be where it may,

you are out on the hill,

wandering, alone

through dancing winds,

through turning, twisting,

beautiful, ice cold fragments

 of whispering snow.

I know you walk deeper

into the darkness

further than I know how to

let you be.

You walk alone across white acres

with no footprints.

Lost to me,

trying to lose yourself,

enclosed in the womb of another winter.

With every breath

I silently call out your name,

……. ……. …….

but nothing,

nothing.

My voice is taken by the dancing wind

and you are lost

beneath the frozen land.

You sleep

amid the moss- lined

covens of angels.

DebJ 02-01-10

 

 

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Sat 24th Apr 2010 10:14

Beautiful imagery - best wishes, Dave

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Alison Mary Dunn

Wed 6th Jan 2010 10:32

Hi Debs, I see a double meaning in this beautiful write. The enigma of your words as always dances in and out of the images you create. As ever I love your poetry very deeply.
Very Best New Year wishes sister muse..

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 4th Jan 2010 16:03

Lovely thoughts and compelling lines, Deborah. I have waffled about what I think you mean: the 'coven of angels' seems to indicate the statues so prominent in some cemeteries, hovering in clusters over graves, and thus 'death' is the underlying force. But elsewhere, death doesn't seem to be the point at all: 'are you so lost AGAIN to me' - 'further than I know how to LET you be'. It seems this 'loss' could equally be someone very much alive but lost to you for reasons known only to yourself. I find that it is a psychological puzzle.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 3rd Jan 2010 22:34

Covens of Angels is an unusual term? I like your expression of being further away than you know how to let him/her be, again unusual.

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Isobel

Sun 3rd Jan 2010 21:58

A very sad and bleak one Debs. Beautiful use of language to express the extreme coldness that comes with emptiness, loss and deprivation.

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Dave Bradley

Sun 3rd Jan 2010 21:06

Well up to your usual high standard Deb. Yet again you are doing lovely things with words and having us feeling that the world is a mystical place that in strange ways interacts with us, especially with our deepest longings. As Francine and Janet have both said 'hauntingly beautiful'.

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Sun 3rd Jan 2010 11:20

Like walking in a white winter wonder land.
Agreed. A very hauntingly beautiful piece.

Happy new year Debs, hope you are well.
Love Janet.x

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Francine

Sun 3rd Jan 2010 06:24

Hauntingly beautiful Poem Deb.

Powerful feelings of past recollections, and of their presence...

'You walk alone across white acres
with no footprints.'

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Beulah

Sat 2nd Jan 2010 23:59

well done.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 2nd Jan 2010 22:37

This is a heavenly poem. Sad and lovely, and spoke to me, who lost someone almost exactly two years ago.

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