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old men leaving cafe tables emptied
tan stubbled faces worn dinner jackets
brown shoes
big gestures
yelling down the block
to a nod then wave goodbye

old women arms full with morning shopping
pleasant round faces bright colored wraps
brown shoes
wrinkled eyes
telling the stories of ages
to a stranger's conversant smile

 

--night is never more than a half day away
from lonesome streets busied by transients
giving up crowded bus seats
to the never less than resigned, going home...

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elPintor

Tue 23rd Apr 2019 08:46

I am a stranger in one of the most densely populated cities in the world. But, maybe everyone is a stranger here.

Sometimes I'm not sure how much the language barrier interferes with perspective. As far as I can tell, it's just like I've heard--people are all the same. And, besides, how far inside can words really get us anyhow?

I appreciate all your kind comments.

Rachel

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Stu Buck

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 13:03

great words rachel, as said below they paint a picture and the denouement is excellent

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raypool

Sun 21st Apr 2019 22:29

I like the sense I get of bustle and continuity, but also the intensity of sharing the feelings of people you may personally not be familiar with. An identification of the essence of a place.
Also it feels that you have opened up your awareness with this poem from the inner world we have been familiar with in previous offerings Rachel.
As David rightly says, the brown shoes seem to be symbolic. A world away from Converse and Sketchers may I say. Footwear say a lot about their wearers I find.

Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 21st Apr 2019 14:41

An appealing vignette of passing life that lingers in the mind.

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Martin Elder

Sun 21st Apr 2019 14:17

Rachel you have painted a picture of life that we all might acknowledge but do not so easily address with such panache and style
Nice one

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