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If you were mine, if you were mine

they’d never see us more than half an inch apart.

No one could get a piece of paper

in between us.

 

There’d never be a time

when your hand was not in mine!

When I wasn’t running my fingers through your hair.

When my arm was not around your waist

and my tongue wasn’t tickling your ear.

 

I could always be found

unbuttoning your shirt

with quiet surreptitious fingers

and gazing into your bluebell eyes with

love love love.

 

If you were mine, if you were mine

we’d never ever waste the time

with niceties like conversation

or silly things like food

and drink and sleep.

Or other people.

In love I’d always keep

you close.

 

If you were mine, if you were mine

I’d tie you to the bedpost

with my garden twine

and scatter rose petals on you

and with comfrey and with celendine

I’d drug you ‘til you didn’t even know

that you were mine

 

And we’d make love

on the village green

and people would smile,

happy for what they’d seen. . . . .

 

If only you were mine.

 

 

 

 

 

◄ Dave and the Mermaid

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 11th Mar 2010 14:43

This is the second time you have surprised me...I love the lyrically feel to this poem... once again a suggestion ..it needs a further verse or two... If you were mine... I think you know what is missing... it is a wonderful love poem after all... make it complete.

Gusxx

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Tue 9th Mar 2010 17:45

I've read this a few times and i too find it a delightful read.
Nice one Ann,

Janet.x

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David Cooke

Tue 9th Mar 2010 14:37

Hi Ann Thanks for the comment on the translations. I don't think you need to worry about 'knowing' anything about Rilke or translations. I'm pretty free and easy with the originals and just try to write something that sounds like an English poem. I think 'The Panther' may have influenced Ted Hughes to write his poem 'The Jaguar' which is well worth looking up. Lke Greg & Stefan I like this one and the more specific it gets the better, like the bit about the shirt & the tying up to the bedpost. The ending has a nicely risque feel to it as well!

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Greg Freeman

Tue 9th Mar 2010 08:44

Have to agree with Stefan: this is one of your best poems, Ann. Like the picture, too. Greg.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 9th Mar 2010 06:42

Thanks Dave. Sadly the lucky man is only in my poor deluded head.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 9th Mar 2010 00:31

Hi Ann

I visited to thank you for commenting on mine and found this beautiful poem. I think I might have said 'lucky man' re a previous of yours and can but say it again.

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 8th Mar 2010 19:37

Thanks Stef xx

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