Isobel

Beautiful Minds

by Isobel

Thursday 25th March 2010 10:03 pm

Some people have beautiful minds…

Insight to the full, fatal spectrum

of a person’s heart

the nuance to a gossamer thread

Ears with sense enough

to hear the tear that doesn’t drop

twisted in its own blood knot

Souls soft enough to sacrifice

All search for self

Yet find the answers to another’s quest

Tongues to find the words

that others run from,

hide or stumble over

Knowledge of when not to know

to nurture, soothe, cut free

or just let be…

Some people have beautiful minds

If only we could fancy them…

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Comments

Isobel

Wed 31st Mar 2010 23:06

Precioussss will do nisscely, she says, hissing in her very best Gollum impersonation...

Rachel Bond

Wed 31st Mar 2010 22:52

i know Is...nice is a terrible thing to say...blasphemous! we will not fight near your poem because it is protected only by the finest of silk threads it is so precious.any better?

<Deleted User> (7073)

Tue 30th Mar 2010 20:04

Depends Rachel heh heh I can be quite generous..... especially if you eat a couple of scousers first lol but not Chris cause he's an OK sort of a guy, and no eating his arms or any other parts of his anatomy either!! ha ha ;-))TC X
PS You have to wear your Dame Edner Everage glasses though as part of the deal heh heh....

Isobel

Tue 30th Mar 2010 17:44

No worries Rachel - I found it all very entertaining and I've never had so many comments - I was rather hoping someone would take it over 30... but as for nice? nice? LOL x

No need to come back on me for that - I am just pulling your leg!

Rachel Bond

Tue 30th Mar 2010 17:30

ps sorry isobel...we will not fight anywhere near your poem it is too nice x

Rachel Bond

Tue 30th Mar 2010 15:49

chris...i have no twinkles in my eyes they are the cold dead eyes of a serial killer.I eat scousers for breakfast in fact dead or not give me your arm itll go nice on a piece of toast.TCstrict bondage of the kind you describe costs good money. just how much where you thinking?

<Deleted User> (7073)

Mon 29th Mar 2010 14:32

OK Rachel you are on, but as you are an obvious trouble maker and are probably dead hard, I will only fight you if you agree to have both hands tied behind your back and your feet tied together ha ha.......
TC

Rachel Bond

Sun 28th Mar 2010 23:48

Thank you for the offer of a fight with your brother. Thats sounds grand to me.I had not had a few the other night, I just talk shit most the time and am always ready to give you a dead arm chris. It makes me uncomfortable when everybody is nice to each other all the time which is why I am usually found starting arguements.If we can just fight instead that'd be great...black eye next time chris?

Isobel

Sat 27th Mar 2010 07:58

I think you are misreading the banter between TC and me, Rachel. He is my bro - we insult each other all the time! That's the problem with flat mediums - as Chris says! I'll introduce you if you ever co-incide at the Tudor - you can clock him one from me! LOL

On the other hand I am now wondering if you were joking with your comment Rachel- you did post it at 1.30am - had you had a few? LOL xx

Ann Foxglove

Sat 27th Mar 2010 06:11

Guess my poem is on the opposite subject Isobel! xx

Rachel Bond

Sat 27th Mar 2010 01:39

i want to say again that this is a trulely beautiful poem and i personally am not into negative criticism from any kind of man about a poem as sensitive and brave as this one. I am not amused.

<Deleted User> (7073)

Sat 27th Mar 2010 00:39

You know I do, and didn't say it was not funny, still..... it is really an exceptionally beautiful poem. XX

Isobel

Fri 26th Mar 2010 23:46

Sod of off with your Worst Poem of the Month TC! I thought you had a similar sense of humour?

Ann - is eating a honey sandwich nach a euphemism for something? It sounds pretty gross to me - I've never liked honey much - if only I did...
I don't think I've ever managed to laugh a man into bed - maybe I could laugh one out?

I think the observations we have all made are fascinating. I find the differences between the sexes immense in so many areas.
If a man can make you laugh it is a huge attraction for women. Having said that, I'm not sure I could ever have fancied Ken Dodd or the one who told all those horrid mother in law jokes.

The bottom line is that women don't just want brawn. They want the whole package - brain - something they can connect with chemically and a laugh chucked it.
Many men are happy to take a body regardless of what is inside it. They are also happy to leave it when it becomes inconvenient.
My jaundiced view on life of course.

Thanks to all for commenting. xx

<Deleted User> (7073)

Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:30

I agree with many of the others it is a beautiful poem, with a naff last line, in which I percieve the hand of deliberate mischief making !! I should know, I have witnessed it's scribing's in prior times. I am going to make a new award... WPOM 'Worst Poem of the Month' and nominate you in 'Poetic Juctice' ha ha for your naughtiness ha ha Much love TC XX

Francine

Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:46

I completely agree with this statement Isobel, in fact I just recently said this to a very special friend of mine.
'I would say that on the whole, the beautiful mind is far more important to a woman than it is to a man.'

And Ann...
I agree with you about the laughter too ; )

Ann Foxglove

Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:15

Just posted my take on the same subject. "Spelling . . "

Ann Foxglove

Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:27

Just eating my dinner (a honey sandwich natch!) when I thought - a man is often said to be able to laugh a woman into bed. Does it work the other way round? Just going back to the attraction thingy (which I WISH I understood!!!)

Ann Foxglove

Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:00

I don't think we can ever be "wrong" with our own poems Isobel. Do what you want to do. Go girl! xx

Isobel

Fri 26th Mar 2010 18:54

I agree with everything you say about humanity Chris. However, I do think that very many people in this world are sad because they are alone and cannot find that mate in body and soul for whatever reason. In that respect animals have one up on us - though I wouldn't want to have the attendant lack of consciousness.

I am not at all offended by your comments. I have been very frank about your poetry and appreciate honesty so long as its sole intent is not to insult.

In order for that last line to cause any kind of reaction comical or otherwise, the rest of the poem had to be authentic - and I guess to me it was. Those are characteristics that I look for in a friend or partner.
Was I wrong to be flippant at the end? Was I wrong to seek to entertain? That is a matter of individual opinion. I am glad that the poem has made us both think at any rate. xx

Isobel

Fri 26th Mar 2010 15:49

Thanks for your comments folks. I'm sorry if the ending was a shock or disappointment for you. It was meant to be....
I have a wicked sense of humour and sometimes like to get up to a little mischief. Perhaps my sense of humour isn't always in line with others... I don't regret that ending though or have any intention of changing it. I don't consider it naff - just mischevious.

I do appreciate beautiful minds - I wouldn't have been able to write 99% of this poem otherwise. I also appreciate laughter. I'm really not taking the piss out of Stephen Hawking. I could just as easily be that beautiful mind that isn't desired physically by someone else.

If you wanted to look at the poem on a more serious level, Chris - you could see it as the human tragedy. In the animal kingdom, creatures, on the whole, just mate. Chemistry and the need to find someone attractive doesn't enter into it. How much happier would humans be if it were the same for us?

If you wanted to discuss it in relation to the two sexes, I would say that on the whole, the beautiful mind is far more important to a woman than it is to a man. That might spiral us into a totally different subject area though and this comment would never end.

Thanks to all for commenting. I do appreciate honesty.

Isobel x

Ann Foxglove

Fri 26th Mar 2010 15:25

I like the poem but felt that the last line threw it all away, for me. It reminds me of how a poem of mine H.D. originally ended on a sort of joking throwaway, and I changed it in the end cos everyone felt I'd cheapened the whole thing. And ultimately I agreed with them. But as you say, it was meant to be a funny poem really. (Yours I mean!) xx

<Deleted User> (7164)

Fri 26th Mar 2010 12:25

I love this Isobel. For me it needs no elaboration whatsoever. I think you captured something special in your poem and undoubtedly priceless.

Janet.x

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 26th Mar 2010 12:11

I was enchanted - captivated by the power of your words and ideas - until the last line! And then, I was shocked. And I reacted: Why did this inspired concept have to centre on a 'man' relationship? For me, the final line was the repetition 'Some people have beautiful minds'- echoing a universal theme.

<Deleted User> (6292)

Fri 26th Mar 2010 11:19

Beautiful legs too!...

Well done, a thought provoking read.

Augusta xx

Cate Greenlees

Fri 26th Mar 2010 10:51

Aint this the truth??
Cate xx

Ray Miller

Fri 26th Mar 2010 10:49

This is good, Isobel, especially the "Ears with sense enough.." verse.Not so keen on the following verse, Souls and all that, too abstract. As the sense of smell is an important element of attraction maybe you should have a verse devoted to that. But I'm being sniffy.

Andy N

Fri 26th Mar 2010 07:53

i get told i've got a beauitful mind but ruin it with dirty ideas! lol

Excellent stuff! Well judged and well wrote piece.. Really enjoyed it

Francine

Fri 26th Mar 2010 00:36

Isobel.......................................................................
You changed it! You reworked my favourite parts too!
Hmmm...
Je ne sais pas... J'aimais tellement l'autre version... C'était si romantique.
Au moins tu as laissé ces lignes là:

'Insight to the full, fatal spectrum
of a person’s heart
the nuance to a gossamer thread'

xxx

Isobel

Thu 25th Mar 2010 23:37

But can you fancy just any beautiful mind? What attracts me to a person is a complicated thing. I think chemistry was invented to torture us all. So often we are attracted to the wrong people. Finding a person with the right mind and chemistry who is also available is like finding a needle in a haystack.

ps - this was supposed to be a comedy piece but I liked the same bit you did Rachel - I should probably have put more effort into improving the other stanzas.

Did you know that there is actually a knot called a blood knot? I researched it on google...

Rachel Bond

Thu 25th Mar 2010 23:05

i really like this..but I only fancy people with beautiful minds.

'the nuance to a gossamer thread
ears with sense enough to hear the tear that doesnt drop
twisted in its own blood knot'

the visceral quality of the pretensions of our emotions belie all the wonderful words you weave in your web Is. lovely poem. blood knot. love it. its like a twist of earthy primitivism with the gory loveliness of the body. I may steal it for the name of another musical escapade :)

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