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HEY! FATSO!

It was a spring-loving day.


YEAH! PORKY!

So early the sun shone deeply warm.


CHOPCHOPCHOP!

Across the fields an easy wind sighed

Fragrant with cherry blossoms.


PIMPLEFACE!

Her bare feet disturbed light eddies of dust.


HEADLIIIGHTS!

Around her thick long hair a red sash glowed.

She felt very beautiful.


Out of the village proper and down the country road

She dream-footed heavily.

She was fat – a porky – pimply – impossibly ridiculous –

And impregnable;

Behind those imperturbable  eyes swelled an exotic bloom

Ripe to unfold rare petals.


She pushed a beat-up baby pram

Carrying a peanut butter sandwich, two books,

A cheap blanket won at a church  fair,

Eyeglasses wrapped in toilet paper,

And a tambourine:

Tin, with six clinky jingles

And the ugly picture of a black-haired dancer,

Spinning,

In vulgar red and bold blue,

A free, wild, whirling

Gypsy.


By the rusted wire gate that no one shut any more because

The farmer kept his cows in another pasture,

Over the oozy ruts

Hop-skipping on the dry spots of the insecure furrows,

Dragging the carriage,

She dream-footed heavily,

The jibes of the village street only a field away.


Down to the creek

Where dashing little waterfalls slowed

To a single sinewy current in mid-stream

And the banks lay in opaque water smoothness,

Damp and glossy with long marsh grass,

Where only the long-fingered weeping willow could point

And the golden-eyed bloodroot see,

Down to the creek

She dream-footed lightly.


Nobody to call: ‘HEY FATSO!   CHOPCHOPCHOP!


By the froggy sky-mirrored water she danced,

Tapping her tambourine,

Quivering with the nervous delight of silken sleeves

Cool slipping down her arms;

Dizzy from the swimming trees excitedly flying around,

Her skirt a swirl of red, orange, green, blue and

Yellow – a treasure, striped in every bright colour,

Hanging to the ankles.


As she jingled her jangles and joyously stamped

Her naked feet, she sang,

‘Tra la la la la la la,’

The clear song of a shameless bird calling

In the springtime.


She flung herself panting to the cushiony earth

And twined her fingers in the sweet grass.

A violet brushed her nose.

She smiled; it was so pretty, its open face so big.

Closing her eyes, back she sank

And dreamed.

           


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Gareth Writer-Davies

Mon 14th Mar 2011 20:34

Have read your other blog poems and this is my favourite-I love this girl!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 10th Feb 2011 16:49

My sincere thanks for all comments. IF I ever had a favourite work of my own, this MIGHT be the one. The girl was/is me, already then a 'physical woman', so early. This is the only admission to autobiographical content that I will ever concede. Children make their own 'happiness' far more inventively than adults do. I have always felt blessed by the Celtic genes from my Irish forebears, a spiritual bond with nature that could never be out-doctrinated by religious influence.

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Elaine Booth

Wed 9th Feb 2011 21:30

This poem has great rhythm and wonderful imagery. I found it both joyful and yet very sad too.

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Paul F Blackburn

Wed 9th Feb 2011 19:56

Great poetry Cynth - one of your best!

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Wed 9th Feb 2011 16:43

It's so easy to let outside influences colour our world, to be so care free, to be aware but refuse to be sullied, to live a full life anyway - I could weep!

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Wed 9th Feb 2011 13:39

Brilliant imagery and the contrast in emotions is spot on in my opinion. Great observations of the cultural differences.

Is this inspired by the big fat gypsy weddings theme? It feels like that to me :-)

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 9th Feb 2011 06:41

I love this Cynthia! By the time you'd got to


"She pushed a beat-up baby pram

Carrying a peanut butter sandwich, two books,

A cheap blanket won at a church fair,

Eyeglasses wrapped in toilet paper,

And a tambourine"


I was totally smitten by her! xx

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Ray Miller

Tue 8th Feb 2011 23:02

Enjoyed this, Cynthia. Dream-footed is a lovely phrase.Lots of good stuff.
I don't think you need this bit

Nobody to call: ‘HEY FATSO!
CHOPCHOPCHOP!


"Dizzy from the swimming trees" is more powerful on its own, without "excitedly flying around" attached.

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Francine

Tue 8th Feb 2011 21:38

And I was just thinking about willow trees yesterday!
This has such a lovely carefree feel to it with some fantastic,
expressive images...

'Out of the village proper and down the country road
She dream-footed heavily.'

'Behind those imperturbable eyes swelled an exotic bloom
Ripe to unfold rare petals.'

'And the banks lay in opaque water smoothness,
Damp and glossy with long marsh grass,
Where only the long-fingered weeping willow could point'

'As she jingled her jangles and joyously stamped
Her naked feet, she sang,
‘Tra la la la la la la,’'


I enjoyed reading this, Cynthia... Merci : )

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Dave Carr

Tue 8th Feb 2011 17:50

This one really grabs you. Some wonderful images.

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Isobel

Tue 8th Feb 2011 16:35

Very uplifting Cynthia. It seems to have a dream like quality - perhaps what others mean my filmic. So often we give into cruelty and the outside world takes its toll. It's not so often we can deflect things so and be happy with ourselves - especially when we are young and pimply...

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Laura Taylor

Tue 8th Feb 2011 16:20

Wow - I absolutely LOVE this! I'm there with her - can feel the sunshine, know the tambourine, smell the grass and feel her joy. This is really emotional, and so beautifully written. And triumphant!

Clinky jingles...fantastic :D

Philipos

Tue 8th Feb 2011 16:07

Hi CBT - jollifications galore here - spring is definitely in the air x

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Dave Bradley

Tue 8th Feb 2011 16:01

Terrific. It's got me longing for Spring - very unsettling.

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 8th Feb 2011 14:33

I should like to echo Greg's sentiments, Cynthia. I love the filmic opening, too. Lovely.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 8th Feb 2011 14:12

I think this is superb, Cynthia. Heart-warming, uplifting, with a fantastic, springing rhythm.

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