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BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR

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BY THE LIGHT OF THE LOCAL SPAR

 

Eyes snapped shut in the street-facing bedroom

lit up by the light of the Spar

that floods it's white plastic windows

illuminating each passing car

 

 

In her curled up hands a faded old photo

crinkled,yellowing,torn,

but the hands,once so gentle,that hold this mementoe,

are as cold,are as granite, as stone

 

In came Sister with a meagre tea tray

barging in,past the bed,past the chair,

but Sister's time was nearly done,her shift almost won,

and the truth was,she'd long ceased to care

 

 

Pushing open the small top window,

then sweeping the curtains to one side

she adjusts the heating's thermostat,

setting it's dial to five

 

Then,”Tea-time”,she shouts,in a patronising voice,

 time to get up! It's nearly seven!”

 oh,the joys of being trapped in a modern care home

 caught somewhere between hell and heaven

 

Don't you know that the paintwork is fading?

can't you see that the bodyclock will stop?

in those satanic,piss-filled corridors,

can't you hear them,one by one drop?

 

 

Sister turned,saw the unmoving bed,

saw the mask of death for a face

whilst the glow of the Spar,in the evening,

hung eerily over the place

 

 

Moving the tea-tray and it's catchment of pills,

onto the flat-topped trolley in the hall,

she briskly marches down carpet-worn stairs

to greet another, waiting guest,in the hall.

CARE HOME ELDERLY NEGLECT

◄ It's so very touching

FLOUNDERING ►

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Elaine Booth

Tue 15th Mar 2011 22:52

Really grim but so well observed. Liked the "light of the local Spar", "curled up hands a faded old photo" and "the tea-tray and it's catchment of pills" - wonderful juxtapositions. Would love to have heard you read this.



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chris yates

Thu 10th Mar 2011 16:38

Care homes don't go there,realistic and chilling I do like how the decay of the building weaves it's way with the decay of life

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Laura Taylor

Wed 9th Mar 2011 14:47

Wow - 'satanic piss filled corridors' - love that john

Take it you'll be doing this on Thursday?

I like how you've wedged in the whole 'windows' thing again!

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Ray Miller

Wed 9th Mar 2011 08:17

Nice poem, John, you portray the soulless routine pretty well.
You drift into past tense here, I think:
but the hands,once so gentle,that held this mementoe,

were as cold,were as granite as stone

Think you need hold this mementoe, are as cold, are as granite.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 8th Mar 2011 22:45

An excellent, powerful, poignant update of Betjeman's Death In Leamington. The light of the local Spar is a great idea. Full of telling detail. I shall be doing the round of care homes in a couple of days, too

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Isobel

Tue 8th Mar 2011 22:00

This is a cheery one John - unfortunately I think there's a lot of truth in it. My sister has just looked round lots of care homes for her mother in law and most do stink of piss - unless you can afford £500 + a week to stay there...grim, very, very grim. I'm hoping euthanasia is legalised by the time I get to that stage. x

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melanie coady

Tue 8th Mar 2011 21:44

i really really like this..quite sad hun

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