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Shadow Boxing

Dream colours fade to silhouette

and flutter to the safety net;

he mumbles up the morning curses:

God and Psychiatric Nurses!

The voices that debilitate

exhorting him to masturbate;

compliant forms that bend devote

and gently take him by the throat

and suckle at an ample breast -

yet women show no interest,

no fumbles in the dark with frocks:

better off inside a box.

 

Commiserate, console and joke,

the outcome is he wants a smoke.

Some make him wait or make him wash

before he gets his daily dosh:

he may react with fortitude,

more commonly he will be rude.

"It's a barmy house", he mocks,

"I'm better off inside a box!" 

 

A consequence of being ill

(real or not, think what you will)

is treatment with a white tablet -

the more you tell the more you get -

and then another for the shakes,

this one can relieve heartaches.

Cyril takes them all, he's sure

that medicine is the only cure.

Sometimes he seeks to scare us, he

embarks on acts of heresy:

"They do no good these pills I pop,

I hear the voices jeer non-stop.

They say I should be in the stocks

and that I'll end up in a box."

 

Counselling does not persuade -

he will not wear his hearing aid,

but left unto his own devices

Cyril contemplates the choices:

swallow pills and swallow pride

or face up to the world outside.

The world outside is full of knocks -

better off inside a box. 

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John Coopey

Sun 13th Mar 2011 23:18

Enjoyed v much Ray.
Particularly impressed with "scare us he/heresy" - read out loud the rhyme is effortless.
Thought the rhythm of the passage from "treatment with a white tablet" ...."relieve heartaches" was a bit hiccuppy to engineer the rhymes. Didn't stop me enjoying it though.

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Ray Miller

Sat 12th Mar 2011 18:52

Thanks all. The character realises that life in an institution is safer, provides shelter and more easily forgives his anti-social behaviour. So, yes, he is manipulating the system but perhaps no more than we all do. The box is both coffin and asylum, often likened to a warehouse.

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Isobel

Sat 12th Mar 2011 18:51

I suppose the box is the whole package of mental health care - its pills, its doctors, its counselling.

A really sad one Ray and yes, well written.

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 12th Mar 2011 13:51

Hi Ray,

Great craftsmanship - as usual, with clever use of enjambment and rhythm. A bittersweet take on something that's potentially stalking us all,

Regards,
A.E.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 11th Mar 2011 23:41

But what is the box? Very thought-provoking, Ray, and well-written

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Jon

Fri 11th Mar 2011 16:40

Hi Ray
I think I can see what you're trying to say in this about dependence on medication instead of facing up to reality.Are you saying the character in question is using the system manipulatively though? Enjoyed the last verse especially "the world outside is full of knocks,better off inside a box".

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melanie coady

Fri 11th Mar 2011 16:31

brilliant hun i really enjoyed it,quite sad,reminded me of an experience of my own..nurses,pills..etc etc..xx

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