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Break The Loop

 

 

Playground names that don’t break bones

but lodge beneath the skin

 

Teenage taunts that build a wall and

haunt the life still to be lived     

 

Endlessly repeated unless we break the loop

 

Malintent, working torment, war of words

and power games, 9-5 hostility

 

Cunning insult greased by wine, each line etched

with fear and fright of losing face and shine

 

Endlessly repeated unless we break the loop

 

Weakness we should understand, why the

underhanded snake behaves in such a cruel way

 

Emerges from a house of hurt where scabs are picked

repeatedly, granulating pain

 

Endlessly repeated unless we break the loop

 

The void so urgently concealed merely reveals

the sad and aching child inside

 

Endlessly repeated until we break the loop

 

Caustic, corrosive, abrasive, defensive -

this mordant mouthing attempts to

replace all the pain and the fear,

the dread and despair.

Display to intimidate, aggravate,

bait and coerce;

cajole and provoke,

to dominate, place

the self in a chain

of command with no rear and no front.

Never to liberate

self or another,

imprison the weakness and feelings

of bullies who bully because

they were shown.

 

 

L   /   O   /   O   /   P         

 

 

Break   the   loop

 

 

 

 

anti-bullying week

◄ Biblical Imbecility

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Cate Greenlees

Thu 24th Nov 2011 17:55

A very strong and thought provoking poem Laura. The first four lines resonated with me particularly as I was anti bullying co ordinator for many years in a school. Breaking the loop can be very hard to do for most children as they live in fear of reprisal from the bullies if they tell, and as you point out it is an ongoing loop to perpetrate on others what has been done to themselves.
Most schools are well aware of the problem these days, and appoint an arbitrator to deal with such problems. I would love to have had this poem to discuss with my children if I was still dealing with this.
Cate xx

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winston plowes

Mon 21st Nov 2011 11:16

enjoyed the message in this and the way you have structured it,I can hear you reading it as I read it here. nice job. H

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Laura Taylor

Mon 21st Nov 2011 09:46

Thanks Andy

What I was trying to do was to show the progression from the bullied kid who takes it with them and infects other people with it - through school, into the work place, into pubs...bullying is all around us. And it always comes back to bullies having being bullied themselves.

Anyway, ta for taking the time to read and comment, is always appreciated

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Andy N

Fri 18th Nov 2011 12:58

excellent, Laura.. it's defo a piece i would like to hear read sometime.. will try to make a note to remind me to ask you - lol.

hope you are good.

see you soon xx

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Laura Taylor

Fri 18th Nov 2011 09:46

Cheers all

Alana - yes, it toughens us up, but I was a very peaceful child until I got bullied. Then I became a bully for a while. I know exactly how this process works. Insight comes through hardship I've always found.

Elaine/Dave - thanks, yep, I think it'll perform well, and the L/O/O/P thing will be spelled out, I reckon. Breaking the loop, literally. :)

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment folks

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Dave Bradley

Fri 18th Nov 2011 09:34

Great. Tough, but needs to be, and, as others have said, does some nice things with words. Absolutely the right thing to be reading in Anti-Bullying Week (and even Alcohol Awareness Week, which is an interesting coincidence).

How are you going to perform the L / O / O / P line??? Looking forward to hearing it anyway.

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Elaine Booth

Thu 17th Nov 2011 21:23

The first 2 stanzas and the fourth are very strong. I look forward to hearing you read this, I'm sure it will be breath-taking. U r. XXX

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Thu 17th Nov 2011 19:30


Good strong stuff Laura..makes you remember..

<Deleted User> (9801)

Thu 17th Nov 2011 18:22

I love first four lines especially, Sometimes it toughens us up? makes us who we are? But is it right? wouldn't we be happier without being toughened up? I wish!!! I'm sure it scars us for life. So Sad, Break the Loop Please?? xx

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 17th Nov 2011 15:05

"Bullies always bully because they can - or could;
Attack is always best defence but not always for good".

Your lines bring alive the malignancy that often lingers through into adult life for both
perpetrator and victim. Who was it said "The child is the father of the man"?

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