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A poetess worth words

A Poetess worth words

 

In my shoe I put the pilgrims flower,

Yellow heart and purple petal

The little star , Speedwell.

Through wooded lanes I climb,

Where rowan tree and cowslip

Bloom in froth of cream

And scent the air with

Procreation’s smell. Soft thunder

Of the waterfall, urgent torrent,,

Pillar of white liquid life ,a strand

On the mountain’s slatey shoulder

Where it breaks the skin-deep green of field.

Up on the lands by Kendal

I am walking dale and fell,

In Wordsworth country.

 

Dark she was, her smile

White as the wave crest

Breaking on the shore of future’s land,

Hair was in   braids about her face,

 Her poems in a notebook,

Spoke of the  freedom to desire,

To answer the inner voice with deed,

Not to be a piece of trade,

In  a family deal  in   Pakistan.

Sermons from the sure-men

 Did not her spirit tire,

Shafilea, a Queen of Sheba, she

Was a  poet born to bloom unheard

Her lyric throat burned by bleach

,Her words scalded from the world,

Her   sweetness snuffed by a killer’s care.

Where are the  words in verse or rhyme,

 To honour her, or name the crime?

 So perhaps the thugs chose well

To lay her body by a stream,

In a wooded dell, in this

The poet’s country,

well worth the words.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 15th Sep 2009 10:54

Stephen, this is a lovely, lyrical piece of work, and a good story development. Am I too bold to see a tongue-in-cheek play on Wordsworth, and the poet's 'Lake Country'? No one else has mentioned such a connection.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 15th Sep 2009 07:42

Hi Steve

Enjoyed bumping in to you last night. It seems we have been reading each other's stuff and thinking 'I like that' is an insufficient comment. Rather late in the day I'd like to leave on record that this one of yours is particularly compelling. I'll be trying to follow more closely in future.

I know that was an odd route from the Mags to the tunnel, but it's the one I know. The Wirral can be a maze.

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Michèle Vassal

Sun 23rd Aug 2009 17:06

I don't know the story behind the poem but I can guess the horror. You have served her well by writing this. Reminds me of Rimbaud " le dormeur du val".

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Isobel

Sun 19th Jul 2009 20:57

Wasn't immediately aware of what this poem was about until my sister told me about it. I normally gloss over nature poems (sorry that's just me) but the real message of this poem comes at the end and the nature is the build up and the backdrop to a very sad very poignant story. A very worthy poetess who deserves to be remembered whatever her level of skill...

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shoeless

Fri 17th Jul 2009 14:52

a shocking end , no one should have to suffer so .

such a gentle start in life too, a little star

i almost wish i hadnt read the poem to the end

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 17th Jul 2009 10:19

Hi Stephen,
I found this to be an interesting poem, and a very different take on a tragic case. You have blended your ideas and themes well here. I wanted to read some of the poetry Shafi left behind and have tried to find it on the web, but with no luck.If you have access I would love to see it.
Regards,
A.E.

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Cate Greenlees

Thu 16th Jul 2009 10:06

Ive come back to re visit this, as I find it a particulary haunting piece of work. The juxtaposition of the young dead girl and the beauty around her is so vivid and moving. It reminds me of one of my favourite poems when I was a young girl, The Lady of Shalott.
Not only is it beautifully written, it has a strong message too. A worthy requiem for the "poetess with words"
Cate xx

Steve Smith

Wed 15th Jul 2009 20:27

Thank you for your comment Beulah - yes that was the point.
Steve

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Beulah

Wed 15th Jul 2009 14:55

As it is, it seems the 'poet's country' is awarded the words and not the Poetess of the title.
Umm, very interesting the orgasm of life leading to..

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