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Our Gramps

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Our Gramps

Our Gramps was a miner, who worked the coal face

A tall man, and proud with a pantherish grace.

His body rock hard as the pick axe he`d wield,

His eyes blue as harebells we`d pick in the fields.

 

Oh how we loved him, and we were so proud

Of his tallness, his blackness, his clogs scraping loud.

“Make them spark Gramps,” we`d shout, hopping with glee

And fire flew from his irons for brother and me.

 

Each evening we`d wait with excited tingle

For the clang of his clogs and his billycan jingle.

Then leaving our hopscotch, our mirps or our jacks

We`d rush off to meet him to welcome him back.

 

Sometimes, just sometimes, he`d bring us a treat

Chocolate biscuits for us two to eat.

In red and gold wrappers, crushed next to his hip

Ambrosia they tasted, and smelled of the pit.

 

On bitter cold mornings when frost nipped my nose

I`d hear him slip out and clop off up the road.

As dawn was just breaking I`d pull up the cover,

And snuggle up warm in my bed next to brother.

 

Hard work could not break him, nor poverty cow.

This land was built on the sweat of his brow.

Though child hood is past, and our Gramps is long gone

The memory, oh  the memory, will always live on.

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Yvonne Brunton

Fri 4th May 2012 19:59

Archivable in its clarity of description of reminiscences through the eyes of a child A time long gone but not forgotten. Wonderful images 'clop off up the road', snuggling up in bed with a sibling, the pavement games,'The body rock hard as the pick axe' I could go on but the others have already said it all. XX

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Neil West

Mon 21st Sep 2009 21:35

Hi Cate, thank you for your comments, I hadn't really thought of it before but I don't often write about the experiences of children. It's something you do especially well in Our Gramps, even though it's ostensibly about the grandfather character (yours?). I also think this poem has a great musicality, I can see you are musical, and makes great use of metaphorical images. Great work. Mind you, I'm a bit scared by For Whom the Wheel Turns, I wouldn't want to get on the wrong side of this character! ;)

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Val Cook

Fri 21st Aug 2009 09:03

Excellent Cate, I love nostalgic poems they really work on the imagination,conjure back memories and give joy. Your poem hits all the buttons.

Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:33

What poignant memories. I am almost inspired to dredge up my own memories of my Grandad and follow your lead in commiting them to a poem. Loved it. Watch this space.
Yolande.

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Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:18

An excellent piece of work Cate, loved it.
Bernie

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th Aug 2009 19:28

Really good, Cate. I enjoyed it. Reminiscences are always delightful. I am going to springboard off this poem with one from my 'archives'. Hope it's OK with you.

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Sat 15th Aug 2009 13:44

Hi Cate,
i love the nostalgia in this poem. Imagery is just great and it brought back many memories of my childhood too. Such a warm feeling, and the ''marps'' we used to call 'em were brill. :-)
Some fantastic lines. I love this poem and i too could imagine this as a song.

Janet.x

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 15th Aug 2009 13:08

Hi Cate,
And thanks for dropping in on "Edge." I liked this a lot, your Grandfather seems like a wonderful role-model. With your musical talents I suspect that this would make a good song - or perhaps it is already? Good to see words like "mirps" resurrected, they enrich the language so much.
Regards,
A.E.

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 15th Aug 2009 11:34

all the world was and is built by such gramps and grans! well done you! now playing marbles (in the gutter) lead to many minor infections but helped build the immune system (see George Carlin-swimming in the Hudson)

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Isobel

Sat 15th Aug 2009 08:53

A lovely poem Cate - can't remember having heard it before. Particularly like the line 'this land was built on the sweat of his brow'. So wish I had known him. x

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Dave Bradley

Sat 15th Aug 2009 08:52

Cate

This is really good. It very effectively gets across some of the richness of life from the point of view of a child. It made me (and I suspect other readers) feel "I wish I had a grandad like that".

Thanks for your comments on Lost and Found. Not a great poem but it demanded to be written. It was good to meet at the Tudor and find we had things in common. And yes being alone on a camping tent is great for philosophising. But as the saying goes "sometimes I sits and thinks, and sometimes I just sits"

XX

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Cate Greenlees

Sat 15th Aug 2009 00:04

Many thanks Winston..... all mistakes edited out!! "mirps" is an old Wigan word for marbles.
Cate xx

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winston plowes

Fri 14th Aug 2009 22:51

Hi Cate

Your reminiscences really come through in this poem. Great source of inspiration your Gramps! Took me back and places me right inside the scenes you describe. Great. Win

you might want to think about these -
- (Minor) do you mean miner
- povery needs a 't'
- billycan is usually one word
- (mirps) what is this game?

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