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The Death of Love

The Death of Love

 

Is our love quantifiable,
can it be counted like the grains of sand which run with ease through our fingers.
Can it be quaffed like a fine wine.
Are we defined by each others love.

 

Do we dissect each moment examining it carefully turning it this way and that;
was there enough passion,
enough intimate meals,
enough words;
never enough words.

 

You never change in my eyes.
You told me I used to be beautiful;
I thought I still was; through love laced eyes.
It was said quietly almost a whisper and with such nonchalance.
I asked if you meant it.. you said "Yes."
My love died.
How fervently you deny those words now,
but they are forever spoken; forever heard.

 

Do I make you happy;
You make me sad.
Do I give enough of me;
You never do.
Do you love me;
I know you do.

 

If I could quantify our love
I would measure it in moments;
A 500 moment jigsaw.

 

I would hope by the end it would be complete.
That it would not become deconstructed;
but there will always be that one piece that does not fit.
That cruel moment of brutality;
and no matter which way you turn that piece it will never fit.

 


© 2018 Taylor Crowshaw.

 

 

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Chris Bainbridge

Wed 7th Nov 2018 14:32

Sad, but very beautifully expressed. I adore the phrase "love -laced eyes".

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 26th Oct 2018 00:57

Words: like bullets - careless shots that can never be
retrieved or the damage done deleted.
A window on the verbal vulnerability of women and the
insensitive cruel comments by men -
Speaking as they find
Without recourse to being kind.

Jemima Jones

Wed 24th Oct 2018 11:26

Amazingly beautiful Taylor. Thank you. Jemima.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 22nd Oct 2018 22:15

Thank you Brian, Jon, Jennifer. Big Sal no not in a book Big Sal..thank you all for your kind words. Great to get the feedback..?

Big Sal

Mon 22nd Oct 2018 21:53

Absolutely stunning in visualization and word choice. You did excellent on this piece, Taylor. I can see improvements in each piece you post, and this one takes the cake.

4-5 favorite lines in here at least, and more when re-read. Please tell me this is on one of your books. .

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jennifer Malden

Mon 22nd Oct 2018 20:05

Very sad because this often happens - some cruel words open our eyes and we see a relationship for what it really is, not what we believed it was. great writing.

Jennifer

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 22nd Oct 2018 19:10

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