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THE RECKONING

She stood under the eaves of a shed,

door open, inviting him in.

"This was his world, everything has to go," she said.

 

"There's a light switch somewhere."

Then he peered about.

Everything exactly as it had been left.

 

Chests of tools, walls pegged for ready access.

A woodwork bench with vices.

Racks of chisels - the smell of linseed oil.

 

Cabinets with escutcheons in brass.

Transistor radio, roof trusses stacked with labelled planks.

A lathe as solid as a battleship docked.

 

Behind a patina'd window a chestnut tree, spared the axe.

A corner chair, made in the shop with snug cushion,

a photo of the family pinned up,

 

him stripped to the waist - good biceps.

 

The man had arrived on time, said little,

making her feel ill at ease.

A practised eye like an undertaker.

 

The moment of truth arrived and went.

"Any original boxes for these tools?" he pondered.

"I don't think so, no," she said.

 

"Makes a big difference to resale values," he said.

Pressed a card on her with a quote on the back.

"Give me a ring any time." he smiled.

 

She noticed he needed dental treatment,

heard the engine of the van as it started,

and with a hand that seemed to belong to someone else

filled the kettle as she watched him go.

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raypool

Fri 5th Apr 2019 15:04

Thanks Jennifer. It seems from the comments that the ladies have an equal appreciation for the atmosphere of spaces like this. My wife does not share it, due to insect invasions! I'm glad that you approve in your welcome style. Chuffed with this poem all round !

Ray

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jennifer Malden

Wed 3rd Apr 2019 18:29

Can't keep up with your output Ray! All good stuff too. Agree with Rachel that one can smell that musty odour that a workshop often has, and the smell of oil and metal. Also one can sense her sadness at having to get rid of 'his world', and her antipathy for the potential shark/buyer. Really loved it.
Jennifer

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raypool

Wed 3rd Apr 2019 17:19

How kind Graham ! Perhaps a certificate hung drawn and quartered presented by yourself in an ermine fringed cloak. That's what I shall deam of at any rate. Many many thanks!

Ray

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 3rd Apr 2019 17:00

If WOL ever creates a Hall of Fame Ray, I think you'll be the first in the door.

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raypool

Wed 3rd Apr 2019 16:57

Hi Trevor. Thank you so much! I feel at home with a bird's eye view in my head as I am blessed with the loveliest of sheds and used that as the example with elaborations. Cheers,. Ray

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trevor homer

Wed 3rd Apr 2019 15:22

Just caught up with The Reckoning to my delight - I like stuff that plants me firmly in the sphere of whatever the piece is about. Both descriptive and immersive - good stuff mate. Don't forget your hat. ha ha ! Trevor

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raypool

Tue 2nd Apr 2019 18:27

Firstly, I am thankful that everyone seems to have got the flavour of this in different ways that all add in to the mix.

Rachel, lovely that you have such a close intimation to this. I think it pays to leave a bit of room for personal thoughts on top.

Dorothy, so pleased this worked for you ! Thanks .

Peter, cheers; nice to have your specific views on my work - you go that extra distance. I do enjoy laying on the voice these days.

Yes Brian, a trying time indeed and often the deals are good for buyers. Thanks..

Vautaw, very kind to pick up the message here. I'm really pleased.

Thanks David. Too close to home, even for my sensibilities. I have met guys like that who are slippery sams, and proud of themselves. Despicable really, but in their world that's about right.

Hi Graham, I think you have picked up on the innate romanticism of the subject, which is close to my own relationship with what I own and use. Yes, I have my granddad's saw in the original army blanket, around 1900 vintage. It is a necessary and upsetting process so often to have to part with that treasured by the departed.

Stu, what can I say? you made my day. I do like descriptive pieces, but they're not always received as well as this one. Thank you!

Mark, you make an excellent case for me thank you!!

Hi Martin, my advice would be to enjoy your piece of heaven, and to we wary if it ever has to be broken up!!

Thanks for looking in, Rich and John.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Sun 31st Mar 2019 23:22

a superb set of memories rolled out in these lines. As has already been said it reminds me of my fathers tools . All of his screws and nails were carefully labelled in his own fair hand. Indeed many of his tools are still there for me to access when I visit my mother. In the garage his golf clubs are still there .
The attention to detail is wonderful here as summed up in the last stanza
Nice one Ray

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 31st Mar 2019 18:09

A trip not only to a dead man's shed and the material evidence of
a life and craft, but to the mundane act of disposal of property after
death - vivid and moving in equal measure.

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Stu Buck

Sun 31st Mar 2019 14:40

ray this is absolutely excellent. one of your finest works and one of the best things i have read on here in a long time

you wonderful man

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 31st Mar 2019 13:03

I think many on us at our age have been through the distressing process of disposing of our parents possessions. For boys in particular sifting through tools and other bits and bobs is particularly poignant. I still have many of my father's tools and garden implements. They are an everyday reminder of him, the patina (on some of them) spanning more than two generations.

This is wonderful work Ray and a source of inspiration too. Bravo!

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Sat 30th Mar 2019 16:46

Stunning imagery with the audio puts me in the middle of the story curious to know more. Excellent job Ray. ?

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Sat 30th Mar 2019 12:46

When my father in law died it took my wife and her sister a year before they got round to selling the house, and at least half of that time was spent painstakingly going through to contents of his shed and trying to find good homes for everything.

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Peter Taylor

Sat 30th Mar 2019 10:24

Wonderful, Ray. The mood is pronounced, significances are quietly and liberally scattered throughought and depths are quickly sounded beneath the thin ice of rudimentary acquaintance. (The bad teeth bit may well be unique in the annals of seemingly sudden flips/shifts of attraction - but who cares? It was new to me.)

Thanks also for the audio - you really shld be on the radio!

Peter T

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Sat 30th Mar 2019 09:40

Ray
This vivid description transports me to this shed/man cave.

From "The smell of linseed oil, and, the chestnut tree through the window, to the cushoned chair I feel that i have been able to peer into every corner -

- and then I feel the resigned sadness chilling my curiosity.
Thank you for this thoughtful start to the morning.

Dorothy

elPintor

Sat 30th Mar 2019 09:33

..strongly descriptive writing--I can almost smell the workshop and feel the fine grime of sawdust and lubricants that is often found on a carpenter's tools. And, the storyline line leaves enough to the imagination to keep it interesting.

Rachel

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