Haha - loving the new profile pic :D

And exactly, re chips/JCC. Bloody hell, it's not like he's advertising arms or owt is it?!

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Hello Ian,
Glad you enjoyed "Cottage Sleaze". I rather liked the idea of ramming something so sleazy into the joyous and bouncy form.

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Morning!

Haha love the juggling metaphor! No, I know what you mean about it working for you - plenty of times it's been that way for me too, where people don't seem to read it the way I hear it in my head, and in my head, the metre is perfect. No worries mate :)

It's a great poem, you should be made up with it :)

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Thank you Ian for commenting on ‘In Only A Contented God.’

What can I really say? I suffer a great deal of mental and physical ill health. The physical problems I can contend with. But the mental ill health is such that on most days I wish for my life to end. It’s harrowing contending with voices that only seek to drag me down from what was once a positive perspective on life. In the past they have caused me to try to cease my life. Before operations in the Gulf conflict of 90/91, I was fit, active and very positive, but nowadays I feel I have been shat on from a great height. I try to gain help when it is offered, but in the main most people do not understand. Even my own family don’t care much for what is left of me. I keep going with what has been a bad set of cards been dealt ever since I was very young. But I often think of the hardships I go through and I sincerely want revenge upon callous gods not only for what I go through, but for what many people endure here in this realm. I cannot believe the universe is some trillion years old and this status be the sum of all our being since creation. Therefor I know within myself this realm is purgatory for the majority. But this particular condition I would not want upon anyone. I am beaten up day in day out by constant voices, and I suffer the physical ailments too. But to top it all, for serving my country in faith I feel that the authorities have shat on me too, and yet, they live within this world as well as I. I am not altogether a bad person, but the way life is treating me is tearing me apart inside. I was once so full of optimism but now, I just want to sue life, and rip the almighty’s head clean off with my bare hands. It just doesn’t make any sense to suffer this way, let alone be at the mercy of environmental and economic poverty. One day, by hook or by crook, I will get revenge and there, you may say I am being delusional, but to live like this is beyond my comprehension of benevolent gods, benevolent gods that in all honesty, do not exist. It just doesn’t make any sense.

Sorry for the rant. I thank you once again and hope that your life is far better than mine. There’s just too many coincidences to say it is down to luck or karma. It bloody stinks.

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Ian,
Thanks for the encouraging comments on `Susan`

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Ian, re Digital Equality - thank you! I preferred that version of the last stanza myself :) I've now dropped One and Two, tried out First and Second but they didn't quite scan right in my head. I think it's definitely improved it. Some come so easily don't they, and others...others are a right bugger!

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Thanks again Ian for the attention to my poems. It's much appreciated.

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I totally recognised your sincerity in 'totem', because I share it. I actively soaked in so much 'Indian' history and literature as I was growing up in the region of the junction of the St. Lawrence River and Lake Ontario. I read countless books on First Nations mythology, with wonder and delight. I had to make myself be analytical, to dig a little deeper and put details into wider context. It's hard not to be reactive to European arrogance, throughout the entire world, not just the America's.

Would you believe, I am right now reading an old textbook called 'Breastplate and Buckskin' which details the European takeover of the 'New World'. It seems remarkably honest, considering the whitewash of history so prevalent in some major textbooks. It refreshes a whole period whose major points had become fuzzy in my mind.

The only thing 'history' is, is a 'story' as constructed by the 'winners'. Much deconstruction will surely come, even now, as scholars demand more honesty from accounts, and, by extension, inform ordinary people like us. Who can even trust the local and international news, let alone history!

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Ian - ta!

Re the code - thought long and hard about that, and in one way, it's not a code, but in another, you use separate letters (symbols) to communicate meaning/represent words, so in THAT way, it is a code.

You're right, qwerty should be in capitals, ta. I did think about making the verses equal as it goes haha, trust you to notice that :D, but 'diarise' got its own line in the end, hence being one line longer. Could easily shuffle it back together again though.

That last verse - nnnggg. I worried that to death. Here's another version of it that I worked on, that I actually liked more, but another person I showed it to preferred the version on here. Would appreciate you looking at it (and using the 'Both' in this ties it to 'One' and 'Two'):

Both
hands clapping;
a parity of palm.
In goat skin tandem
slapping rhythm in a beat;
equality
in QWERTY code;
touch type testifies to
balance in the word.
One hand clapping
seeks the silence of the world.


Cheers!

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Eh up - same author ;)I've got both :)

Fairy muff re the rhythm, chuck

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Ian,
Like the silly old fart I am I always imagine everone is addicted to the same tele shows as me, sorry.

(They are three characters from the Big Bang Theory)

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Hi Ian, many thanks for the kind words on 'radio'. Enjoying your audio tracks.

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Hi Ian

Thank you for your great comment on my poem. Much appreciated :-)

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What is a 'typical Yorkshireman' then? Will you give me some clues?

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Well never come between a man and his sport, well I will make sure I see you when you do your spot with Jeff and I sure hope to see you at mine :)

Regards as ever

R

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Well done Ian really enjoyed your night :)

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No worries Ian. And haha, yep, making the most of my waning youth my friend, making the most of it.

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Hello Ian.
Thanks for commenting on "We Are Lion".
I have to say I do prefer Union to League although I'm perfectly happy watching either.
In fact I was at Odsal last night watching British Police playing Fiji Police in a triangular tournament with the Aussies.
They shared a 72-point thriller. The score was 72-0 to Fiji.
Not surprising really. When the final whistle went the GB team only had 11 players on the pitch. We reckon the Fijians had eaten a couple.

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Jesus Gene? shit hottest,of the hottest!
now comes the follow up-ooer!
only kidding,big guy.xx

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Hello Ian,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Cradle - A Triolet".
I confess my start point was to find two rhymes with lots of possibilities. The inspiration came from reading "Stonehenge" by Bernard Cornwell - a source of much of my limited knowledge of history.

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Hello Ian - Thanks for your comments on "Camp". They are much appreciated. I wish I was as prolific as you!! - Jon

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Aye, it really must be an age thing. And economic too, almost certainly - it is more expensive now than it's ever been apparently.

Ha - maybe we were separated at birth?! I wrote a poem about needing to be alone a couple of years ago - link here. Its alternative title is 'Just Shut The FUCK Up!' ;D

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=24466

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howdy Ian- ta for the comment on my last effort.

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Thanks for your comments x

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Thanks for your thoughts on "Filey", Ian. The first time we went there in the in-law's caravan some 30 years ago, we decided to go the week after Easter. We thought it would be packed for Easter week. When we got there it was shut.

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That's really made my day, you saying that! Glad you are enjoying my work : )

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Thank you for your comment Ian, I love your poem noticed btw!

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Hello Ian,
Glad you liked "Your First Hut is the Cheapest".

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Thanks for the comment on The Trainers poem, Ian. My wife thinks I was on something when I wrote that one - still you have to go where the muse takes you!

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one forgot to mention the fact that the said three inch,eight legged monster was,as they(daughter and son-in-law)were,living in Arizona at the time.
Who knows? they might have been sent divine intervention from Shy Ann! tee hee.x

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re spiders and the like.Twas only recently that my Daughter and Son-in-law nearly became names on headstones had they not been alerted by the dog to the presence of a highly poisonous Sun spider wanting to tuck into bed with them!! phew!xx

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hey Ian :)

I like the way you read me..pleased you enjoyed this latest offering. :) Feng shui for the soul indeed!

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It's actually really comforting to hear about the specific things that you do, you know :) I totally understand. Certain things can also make me feel really nauseous. Our house is a bit of a tip cos none of us like tidying up, but an overflowing bin or lots of stuff on the kitchen table make me feel physically sick, and I have to get it sorted right away! It is possible to get it under a measure of control, I've done it, but it takes immense self-will and it's incredibly hard work.

Ha - and isn't that the beauty of poetry eh? You'd feel a total loon telling someone about it, but put it down in a poem, and there will always be someone out there who feels the same way :)

Nicely done

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Thanks for your supportive comments on my poem about Stephen Lawrence, much appreciated.

Mark

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Hahaa - mmm interesting take on it, the creativity surges. I suppose so, but tbh, I became so bad with it that it did occupy every single minute of the day and my whole mind.

An example: if I was walking down the road, and scuffed a stone with one part of my foot, I had to replicate that with the other foot but on the EXACT same part of the foot. If there was ANY difference in the symmetrical location, then that second action had then to be replicated on top of the initial replication.

This would often build up into multiple replications, all needing to be done and ticked off in my head. I didn't have time to do anything else after a while, my entire being was consumed by it, and I came to the realisation that it had to stop or I would proper lose it. I was only about 9 or 10 when it hit its full height and had to bring myself out of it. It wasn't allowing me to go off into any kind of other thought process so in that respect it wasn't helpful at all - I do love to daydream!

It was immensely comforting at first though - still can be, when I get it right ;D It just feeds on itself though, which is the bugger.

Apart from us, did you tell anyone else about it? I didn't tell anyone about the symmetry thing until I was in my late 20s.

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Hi Ian THanks for kind words on my photographer poem.

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Well Ian.. My whooshes are usually a good thing..so yes an acknowledgement lol. :)

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Hey Ian..Thanks so much for the great comment on my last effort..To be honest I don't do political poetry much at all...(and that fourth verse is my fave too!)

Again thanks so much :)

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cheers Ian :o)

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Hi Ian- :o) what CRASS lyric was that please?

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Hi Ian, yes 'Jigsaw' can be both literal and non-literal can't it. That's why it's good. Nice bit of extended metaphor. :-D

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Hello Ian,
I think you win this week's quiz on Gropexxxx Lane!

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Hello again there Ian :)

You know something?..I did have trade in there then at the last minute I decided to put in buy..hmmm..a couple of folk have thought this was about real life so to speak..D'ya think it is too ambiguous?..What made you realise it was about a car?..thanks Ian
Stel

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Shame on you Ian!! tskk...even old bangers have feelings yer know! :) Thanks for the lovely reply to Second-Hand Love x appreciated..

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Hello Ian, Sorry to hear that 50 Shades made you drop you coffee. I hope the scalding has cleared!

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Ian, thanks for your kind comments on my stuff, much appreciated. I have not been very active lately but I am back now! Will be reading some of yours shortly, will let you know what I think :-)

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And thanks for the comment on my latest. Means a lot, ta.

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Hi Ian, thanks for the kind comments on 'Breaking Out From the Basement'. I could offer you an explanation of sorts, but yes, by all means take whatever interpretation you can from it! Cheers.

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Hi Ian - exaggeration in real life equals poetic licence in another! But your lines surely ring bells with those who suffer.
Cheers...

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Hello Ian,
Many thanks for your kind comments on "Tickle Cock Lane". I'm not exactly a Cas lad although I worked for a good number of years at Allerton Bywater.

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