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Persephone's Creek

 

Persephone's Creek (April 2009)


She'd have lived but for the shoes,
I'll not forget the irony in that.

When we were young, she had more blisters
on her feet than freckles on her nose
and would sooth her terraced toes
by mine, in Persephone's Creek,
half caught between the underworld and here.

She would prophecy of dresses,
wish for a fedora
(which I always thought was cheese)
but most of all it was the shoes.
"When I get married," she'd say,
"My feet will never touch the Earth again"
by which I thought she meant to fly
(so phantom were her dreams)
but it was the shoes she meant.

The first pair arrived during my eighth summer -
an admirer's gift.
She didn't put them on but stared
or held them in her lap like ugly dolls
and wouldn't let me touch them.

Days passed and when we bathed our toes,
she'd huff and sigh and look to the sky
as if to ask for permission.
I did not realise then that it was strength
she sought from the Gods
and in those darker days when she'd not meet my eyes,
she was looking down to Hades on his throne.

Once she'd tried them on, she was true to her word:
those feet never touched the ground again,
not while she lived.
She danced over mud and would kick me in the bath
but I could not resent her for they made her smile
and she would steal fruit for me.
She said they made her faster than the wind
and in a way I believed her,
even when I saw she bought the fruit with
pomegranate seeds; it was part of the magic.

She wore those shoes even when the gangrene
peeped its head above their rim
and changed them only for another pair,
on her wedding day.
We all knew then what deal she'd made
and all for a pair of shoes.

 

I get to do writing myth as a module next year, whoooo! It reminded me of this poem so I thought I'd share :)

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Sun 8th Aug 2010 13:04

This is a tale to suck us in Heather - frankly I wanted more...... Please? :) Best wishes, Dave

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Rachel Bond

Sat 7th Aug 2010 22:14

i love this...its perfect.

reminds me of the folk loric tale, the red shoes.

are you able to make it to the 'misery begins at home' book launch, salford crescent Aug 19th?

id like to see if you could read if you wanted to? I think your work compliments mine and I am fascinated by myth. would be good to chat with you x

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Ray Miller

Fri 6th Aug 2010 17:21

I thought first 3 verses were very good - so phantom were her dreams is a great line, as Ann said - though I don't think the rest lived up to expectaions.Partly because I'm not familiar with the myth but also I thought the quality of writing waned. It's gangrene by the way.

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Isobel

Fri 6th Aug 2010 08:56

I like this one - tis one I can identify with and a favourite subject of mine. I like the way you have woven it with myth. The shoes seem to represent a sell out and entrapment in your poem - I think shoes are wonderful images - they can represent so many things.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 6th Aug 2010 08:49

I like this Heather. One of those poems that you need to read a few times. "so phantom were her dreams" is a lovely line.xx

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Andy N

Fri 6th Aug 2010 08:04

Good stuff, Heather.. You defo should get out and perform your pieces more.

On this piece I really enjoyed this - however on this line you may have a word missing 'She would prophecy of dresses' x

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