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Tough old boots

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The costly forestry boots our kid insisted

Warmed your twisted feet in the afterlife

Didn’t worry me in the slightest;

For you it was never about the price.

 

It wasn’t your trainers which strained my heart,

Or the leather uppers kicking me in the guts,

not the steel toe caps breaking through healed scars.

Or even rubber wellies wading through the tears.

 

No slippered reminder of evening hours,

No sandals citing slipped away summers

No flimsy plimsolls linger to tease me,

Frivolous footwear was never your thing.

 

Parting with the wrinkled fur lined riggers

feeling they would never again figure

in future footsteps left no aching

sole felt sore as I saw them departing.

 

It’s knowing the old stiff soled walking boots,

Laces flattened under hooks, tongue lolling;

Still in the tread - dried dirt from lakeside routes

… will not walk again over cold Helvellyn.

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Francine

Wed 6th Jul 2011 21:08

Fabulous! What can I say that hasn't already been said?

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Emma McCourty

Wed 29th Jun 2011 12:04

Hi Alison! great to meet you at sale last night :o) I love this poem! well done! Take care :o)

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Cate Greenlees

Wed 15th Jun 2011 15:16

Beautiful poem Alison. Who would have thought a theme like feet could have produced such a depth of emotion?Cate xx

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Elaine Booth

Mon 13th Jun 2011 22:05

This is so good, Alison. Absolutely love it. So well written.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 9th Jun 2011 14:50

This is a really fine poem, Alison, which will be up there with the best in the competition. But obviously far more than just a poem.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 8th Jun 2011 13:13

Love all the little shifts and tricks in here, the alliteration, the rhymes, the metaphors - it's jam-packed! And with such poignancy too.

Sounds great rolling round in my head - reckon it'd be a good one to perform.

Great poem.

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Ray Miller

Wed 8th Jun 2011 12:14

Enjoyed the poem. I think the penultimate line would read better as

dried dirt from lakeside routes still in the tread

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Wed 8th Jun 2011 08:53

Rodney, many thanks for comments. Gave me much useful thinking. Normally when I start a poem I seem to begin with a really strong first line, a good idea of the middle bit and flounder into a weak ending (well, that's how it always seems in my head). This one was a little bit of a departure, and the verse now at the start was originally the second verse.

It's really useful seeing your thoughts on this because although to me it tells a story in the sequence it happened, it doesn't always convey itself to the reader, and it's done me good having a good old think about this. The reason I shifted that verse is because the whole poem relates to getting rid of the old footwear of the deceased, and the first pair to go are the boots chosen to quite literally go to the grave.

Again, many thanks, you really have me pondering!

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John Embley

Tue 7th Jun 2011 20:39

This atmospheric poem paints vivid feelings in every stanza, Alison. Like Greg and Isobel, for me, the last four lines, with 'cold Helvellyn' really close it off beautifully!

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Isobel

Tue 7th Jun 2011 20:20

Crumbs - I wish I was as tough as those old boots - you've got me really feeling here. That last line is a killer. We live each others lives here on WOL - this is beautiful - sad but beautiful and a wonderful tribute to the owner of those boots. Walking boots denote the person in action - the life blood I suppose. I love it Alison - really love it. x

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Rodney Wood

Tue 7th Jun 2011 17:27

Loved the feel of the poem and the way it walked down the page. Not sure about the first verse though.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 7th Jun 2011 16:30

Terrific, pounding poem, Alison. Cold Helvellyn. One of the best I've read here in a long time

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