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In this place
temptation
drizzles each day,
torrents at night.
A missing Chirstmas day
fell at high tide,
cost him
four thousand baht.
It was a contrite
Cassanova
who returned
on Boxing Day,
his empty tail
dithering
between wobbly legs.
We were peeved
at the lack of
thought....yet
when you consider
it all, family versus
Thailand fornicaiton
are such uneven odds
when you're only
21.
It's a great poem, but 'love' in the title is wrong.
Ha - fab - loved this stella. Poor lad though, all you lot taking the piss out of him :D
Ban cock?
Primo posting, Stella; I particularly liked,
'It was a contrite
Cassanova
who returned
on Boxing Day,
his empty tail
dithered
between wobbly legs.'
although [nit-picking, and sorry for it] I want to read 'dithering' rather than 'dithered'. Am I not reading it properly? And thanks for your comments on 'Poetry' etc. You can be my commissioning editor anytime!
Hi Stella,I've just joined write out loud and your poem What Price Love? was the first one I read. Liked it a lot. Created a good picture.
You've led me right up and down the garden path with this one Stella!
Now I don't feel quite so outraged or judgemental. You can get away with so much more in youth. If this had been about a middle aged man with a wife and kids, it just wouldn't have been as acceptable.
Yes - I think fuck sums it up better than love. Does the 21 refer to the age of the girl or the man? I imagine 21 would be a grand dame over there...
As women, we are really so lucky to have been born in the West.
good. (and this update even better)
But would you call it love Stella?
I bet you saw some real sights on your trip to Thailand. The sex trade/marriage industry over there, where young girls tie themselves to ugly old men, is nothing short of economic exploitation. How they live with their conscience, I've no idea.
There's a story to this. An arresting write, Stel.
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John F Keane
Fri 17th Feb 2012 08:11
Or any other age, for that matter.
I thought Casanova was only spelt with one s, though.