Pleased you like The Scourge of God Dave.
I tried a different format with an internal (lines 1 and 3) rhyme, but unrhymed outer (2 and 4). Still with a heavy trochaic rhythm.
I do have an interest in all things historic, so I don't suppose Attila will be my last; but no set subjects as yet.
(I do find the very readable and funny An Utterly Impartial History of Britain by John O'Farrell inspirational).
Once again, thanks for commenting.
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Thu 4th Aug 2011 14:04
Thanks Dave, I really appreciate it. M
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Hi Dave -- thanks for your comment on 'Back Home' .... I didn't, in fact, think too much about the structure, it just sort of fell onto the page, but I have been trying to tighten stuff up a bit before I pluck up the courage to read a few out loud ... thanks again -- very encouraging!
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Philipos
Mon 1st Aug 2011 10:12
Hi Dave, re:'Holding Thoughts', glad you enjoyed and was able to comment - cheers.
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Sat 30th Jul 2011 13:36
well...was about being haunted when you don't believe in ghosts..Pleased you liked :)
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Eh up chuck - thanks for your perceptive comment on Invocation :)
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Thanks for commenting Dave. I read your piece on the walk with asylum seekers, you do yourself a disservice. It is important that you have used your considerable skill as a writer to write against the grain, so to speak, and give an insight into what it means to be an asylum seeker. Too many people believe the crap churned out in the tabloid press.
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Dave
Thanks for your thoughts on "The Ghost of White Hart Lane". It's an old post, but it put me on for the "Ghost" theme until I did something new. (Alison has widened it to goblins and fairies etc so I've just blogged "The Fairies in the Backs" - a bit of a stretch, I know!).
I too am old enough to have seen John White but don't know if I did. I saw Spurs a couple of times in the early 60's at Forest (I'm from Nottingham originallY). He might have played.
Anyway, glad you enjoyed it.
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Sun 24th Jul 2011 23:55
Dave..glad you liked Sancastles :)
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Fri 22nd Jul 2011 08:50
Cheers Dave, honesty is very important to me in all things.
Glad you liked the piece xXx
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Hi Dave, thanks so much for your comment on Ghosts of Rivington Moor, enjoyed writing it, good to know it had the desired effect on you. It's quite fascinating in a barren way but there's a lot to it. Not been up there for a while but always like the experience, as for those new fandangled GPS things, well, yes could probably need one if weather was that bad! Hope to see you soon mate Jeff
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Philipos
Thu 7th Jul 2011 15:32
Hi David re: The Water's Edge - how apt your view about the changing weather moods of UK - many thanks for commenting.
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Philipos
Fri 1st Jul 2011 23:03
Thank you for commenting on African Cameos David - much appreciated. I have to give a presentation on African poetry to a group in October and will be using these as warm ups with the work of Ingrid Jonker and others.
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Thought I'd avoid a loan shark!
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Philipos
Sun 26th Jun 2011 20:36
Hi Dave re; The Railway Children, that picture referred to was hanging on a wall of a local hostelry from where I gained my inspiration but glad you like the general theme of the muse. Many thanks for commenting.
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Philipos
Sat 25th Jun 2011 20:15
Hello David, Re: Highway to Heaven - life changing perhaps rather than intriguing and certainly scary for those who have them - mine being at the top of Ayers Rock in Oz some years ago but it came with a free ride to hospital in a flying doctor's plane. Many thanks for your comments.
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thanks for commenting on my poem dave :)
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Sun 19th Jun 2011 21:06
Dave - Many thanks for taking the time to comment (mackerel sky). B
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Hi Dave, thanks for the comment.... not sure about the performance bit!!!!!
Cate xx
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Thu 16th Jun 2011 16:47
Hi Dave, many thanks & glad you liked it (zen)
In that case - if you are feeling "receptive" I posted another gem a while back, but not mine, - by a guy called David Harsent - you may know it already, but I wanted to share it with WOL community as a little nugget, but it never got a word! - Hope you like it.... for me, poetry doesn't get much better than this.
David Harsent
Red
The skim on the surface of your soup, or the cut on your plate
in the Café des Anges, juices swamping the willow-pattern skiff
as she dabs her mouth with her napkin, your blind, blind date,
leaving a smudge, lipstick-and-gore, though there’s still a worm
of gristle in the gap between her teeth.
Mood music, candlelight, wine, low voices in a world of harm,
the creature brought down, hindquarters heavy, hind legs
broken by the dogs, its head held up, eyes wide,
the tangle and drag as a gralloch knife unpegs
the bulk, all slippage and seepage, and the way she thumbs
a morsel into your mouth, or smiles your smile
back at you, lets you know that everything’s just as it seems,
then back at the small hotel, she strips off quicker than you
might have hoped, pink as a new-skinned cat, all too
eager to have you by heart. Her cry tells you nothing new.
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Dave, many thanks for your comments. Much appreciate it. X
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Thanks for your comments on Prestatyn. If you can keep a secret -
I've never been!
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Hehehe, I thought people here would latch on very quickly to the "First they came ..." reference, and you did not disappoint! I do love a bit of pastiche ...
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Yep, you got the reference spot on of course! Thanks for your comment. X
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Thanks for the empathy on The Clackety-Clack, Dave
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Well actually, it was about panning for gold in Wigan ;-) Glad you enjoyed the sedimentary layers. x
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Fri 27th May 2011 13:08
thanks dave - much appreciated. B
(birth of the night time)
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thanks got your comment dave
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Many thanks for the kind comments on Port Isaac Dave. some pieces just write themselves. just spent a week there and the surrounds. Does Ann live near there then? Regards, Graham
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"who often seem to use vicarious success to bolster their own fragile self-esteem, aided and abetted by a sycophantic media and international branding" - WOW!
It's a good job I wrote the poem, Dave, and not you!
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There's memory for you! I had a sneaking feeling I had the wrong month. What about you? Have you got one game that sticks out, when everything seemed aligned, somehow? I think it's got to be when you were a kid, before you realised there were other things in life. And I don't fancy our chances at Goodison: it's just lucky the title isn't resting on it!
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Thanks for comment on Dreamland, Dave. I hadn't intended it for the competition, but only realised after posting it that it would probably fit. x
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Philipos
Wed 11th May 2011 19:27
Thank you for the comment on Newlands Corner Dave - appreciated.
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Deborah Jordan Bailey
Sun 24th Apr 2011 20:26
Diolch, Dave, am eich sylwadau caredig.x
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Thanks for comment on Ohrwurm Dave - yes, 'earworm' is a loan translation from the German ohrwurm, so an interesting word all on its own, never mind the poem itself. The poem seems to be introducing earworms all over however - I did it to myself last night and was Hawaii Five-Oing all bloody night.
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Wed 13th Apr 2011 20:37
Hi-thanks for the comments (a kind of heaven).
I wrote this about 2-3 yrs ago but it took me a while to decide if it was "worthy" of posting - funny - folks seem to like it !
- there's no accounting for taste... I like it, but I didn't think most would "get it". Ta. B
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Hiya Dave,
thanks for the comment on my comment :) I appreciate the support x
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Thank you so much Dave, for taking the time to read and comment on 'Stranger in a strange land'...
It had to be written.
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Hi Dave, thank you for kind comments on "And your name is?" Much appreciated, Lynn x
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Philipos
Sun 3rd Apr 2011 12:10
Dave (re: RIP)I am sorry if this opened up old wounds and can only empathise with your loss - it took courage to go back and read the poem again and I appreciate your comments even in the light of your difficult circumstances
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Thank you for your comments on "Luxury". Glad you enjoyed it. XXX
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Thanks Dave, it may have more to come yet, I really don't know, just the images sort of came at me earlier on...it may become a series :) x
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Hi Dave. This trip was a couple of years ago. This year (Sept) I am doing something called the Raid Alpine which is tough. Thanks for googlizing. In the world of pro cycling the olympic title has not been as highly regarded as in other sports. Glad you liked the poem. Win x
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Deborah Jordan Bailey
Mon 21st Mar 2011 14:02
Philipos
Sun 20th Mar 2011 14:20
Hi David - many thanks for your supportive comments on Reliquary, I'm pleased it worked for you at least.
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Sat 19th Mar 2011 07:52
Thanks Dave, it's one of my darker pieces, thought it was about time I put one up! ;) xXx
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Thanks for your comments on the Betjeman poem, Dave. I'm amazed, though. I hadn't got you down as an old Harrovian.
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Laura Taylor
Wed 10th Aug 2011 14:21
Cheers Dave, much appreciated
Kind of topical too, what with the various angles of reportage at the moment :)
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