Peter Asher

Hi Peter
I've had a quick go at your first lines maketh a new poem

Carol Ann Duffy ‘First lines only’

Doo wah diddy diddy, Baby Love, Oh, Pretty Woman
The little people on the radio are picking on me
They see me always as a flickering figure
There are not enough faces. Your own gapes back
Today I am going to kill something, anything
No I don’t remember the thing itself
Firstly I changed my name
Wear dark glasses in the rain


Those early mercenaries it made them ill
Somewhere at the other side of this dark night
At the turn of the river, the language changes
After I no longer speak they break our fingers
Then with their hands they would break bread

Today we have a poet in the class
Imagine living in a small dark city for 20 years.
Things get away from one.

Rearranged by Yvonne Brunton


perhaps I ought to get out more too!

Thank you

Hmm sounds interesting did you select for meaning or meaning and metre?

Hi Peter
Thanks for your comment on 'The Kiss'

I know your 'Found Poem' doesn't really qualify as a true cento - maybe you have created a new genre!
Have you ever attemted a cento? Me No. But you have set me wondering. I suppose using a long target poem would give more material from which to select phrases etc for the new work.

Thanks Peter for your comments Like your poetry very much Just read Wild Cat and the photo well; I can relate with that I carried a poor cat off the main road to a safe place The memory of it is still with me

Thanks Peter :)

Sylvia Plath is wonderful, i'm a massive fan. i'm not a fan of her husband, partly because i just don't like his poetry, and partly because i believe he contributed to her suicide.

Hi Peter.

appreciated your correctly
descriptive comments
of the feelings
put to the reader/s of my poem-
'forfeiting'

thank you so much.

Hi Peter, thanks for your comment! It's good to know somebody agrees with me.

By the by, I really like your poem 'Hares' - it has a very Ted Hughes-esque firmness which is hard to come by in a lot of poetry.

Hi Peter, loved reading the 'Hedgehog' poem not sure about picture though, it did scare me when i first looked.... ;-Z

When I say entertaining, I don't mean in a ha ha ha way - I mean in an enjoyable read way. I like poetry that I can understand - I like the way you looked back at the experience of a child, through an adult's eyes - I just connected with it. There is so much poetry that you have to bash over the head with a shovel to get the meaning from it. Sometimes it is nice just to read an experience expressed in a wry and amusing way. I didn't pick up on the plagiarism allusion. I just thought you were likening yourself to someone base and I liked the biblical allusion.

Yes poetry from our youth can seem naive. We are hopefully improving all the time. I cringe now at poetry I wrote 5 years ago.