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Andy N

Fri 1st Aug 2008 20:45

Didn't know you were on here Kylyra, but of great to see you here.. I don't think you need to know how good I think your stuff is, but it's excellent of course!

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Andy N

Fri 1st Aug 2008 20:42

Great poem, Derek as I told you on LSPC reviews a bit back! Hope you are well! Andy N

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Pete Crompton

Fri 1st Aug 2008 20:01

I'm convinced blokes like messin about with women, err I MeAN messing about as women!

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carol falaki

Fri 1st Aug 2008 09:41

eye off the ball?
love all
so no net?
game set.
a super poem Antonioni

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Jeff Dawson

Fri 1st Aug 2008 07:32

Nice one Antonio, you've set me up for the day in the rt race, feel very relaxed now! Nice lines and words Jeff

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clarissa mckone

Fri 1st Aug 2008 03:09

HI Carol, ITS WONDERFUL !!!!!

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clarissa mckone

Fri 1st Aug 2008 03:06

HI Mark, nice little poem here. Not many sheep "farmers" around Texas. You will see them just once in a while. Could be they are all up in Washington dressed in wolves clothing.

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Thu 31st Jul 2008 23:32

Nope. sorry. not on this occasion !!!

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 31st Jul 2008 23:28

I'm re-inventing the Beatles song at present.
Six days a week. Gotta scrape some cash back from June, when i couldn't work.
Didn't expect you to change it, it's yours to do with as you please.
Thanks for comment to my sonnet.
Love Janet.xxx

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 31st Jul 2008 23:18

Haaa Haaa.
Baa baa black sheep would have been proud of her.

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Thu 31st Jul 2008 23:00

Oh yeah! Just like a man! Give in.
This isn't meant to be a tennis courtship sonnet is it Antoninoni? There's two painted lines missing.
Advantage me.
Your serve.
Janet.xx

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<Deleted User> (3509)

Thu 31st Jul 2008 22:43

beautiful idea of tennis and love. Ha ha love. That says it all. Nice one Antionioni

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 31st Jul 2008 22:41

Hello stranger. My emails have been coming through a day late as well. Must be something to do with the weather eh?
Or maybe it's the earth doing another rotation, messing up the satellite systems etc...
( incidentally, it is actually getting ready to turn.)

Anyway, after that little gem, i like your words of wisdom. Absolutely spot on!

Hope you don't mind my saying though, the end of the second line, although it fits in with the rhyming scheme. Somehow it loses the rhythm.
Does that make sense. Ignore me if you like, it was just an observation i made as i read it.
Love Janet.xx

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Thu 31st Jul 2008 22:17

Thanks David for the comment.
hope you enjoy my myspace site.
i'm still learning all this, so some are better than others. i'll keep practicing!!!!
thanks
woman

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 31st Jul 2008 20:26

Lovely tribute Carol to a wonderful mum by the sounds of it, love the first 2 lines, Jeff

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carol falaki

Thu 31st Jul 2008 17:02

Thanks Darren,
I think you are right and I'll have a look at it over the weekend. Thanks again. I like constructive.

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darren thomas

Thu 31st Jul 2008 16:01

Not from the top of my head. There is an 'Emily' on this site and she reinforces your theory. Phonetically, it sounds as appealing as it looks. You could poke your finger into the name's letters and just stare as they morph slowly back into shape.

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<Deleted User> (4979)

Thu 31st Jul 2008 15:55

Thanks Darren.

Can you think of an ugly Emily though seriously?

I liked your Mental Virus entries too. I think this one has been the best yet

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darren thomas

Thu 31st Jul 2008 15:41

Sean - I like this. I like it a lot.

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Sean Kavanagh

Thu 31st Jul 2008 11:17

Thanks Mark. Finally got round to getting my profile up there. Your humorous stuff (addiction, symptoms of love and the day the world died) had me tittering away. Lovely dry punning.

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darren thomas

Thu 31st Jul 2008 00:28

Hi Carol -it's the word 'commodious' that I struggled with. It felt like I'd dropped a load of marbles onto the floor when I read it. The letters just seemed to spill and bounce everywhere, and I don't understand how it fits in with the birds - given its definition. Plus, it's an archaic word in some contexts and I always struggle with archaic words in poetry, especially when they're mixed with more contemporary words. Is there not a synonym that could fill its shoes. Shoes that are not as cumbersome or awkward. Shoes, like, say, err - open sandals? Comfy shoes.

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Mark Niel

Thu 31st Jul 2008 00:27

Really nice work Sean

Welcome

Mark

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<Deleted User> (3509)

Wed 30th Jul 2008 23:07

Hi

I understand the rat race. Enjoyed your poem.

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Mark Niel

Wed 30th Jul 2008 22:02

Antonionioni,

Thank ewe!

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darren thomas

Wed 30th Jul 2008 11:39

I enjoyed this too. From a poetic point of view it is written in a style that i enjoy most. Plenty of imagery, very few or no clichés and a poetic turn which on this occasion arrives with the last line.
There were perhaps one or two words that felt like swallowing a cocktail stick but overall it 'felt' good. Personally, I don't drink too much tea and coffee so I don't have a favourite and lasting mug.
If I did, it would probably say 'most opinionated t****r in the world'.

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Wed 30th Jul 2008 11:26

Well done that man my SON, love him to bits, I too write, but not out loud, maybe one day if I am invited to do so. Heart of gold he has. June Slater

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David Franks

Wed 30th Jul 2008 10:21

I hope you see the light, Penny and put your musical skills into English folk, rather than American pop...The Beatles even tried talking with American accents - should we admire them?

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Wed 30th Jul 2008 05:45

Dear Carol

Excellent poem - Bravo!
Life embraced in your write, and it shows that is not an easy one. The metamorphosis is there...This one is very profound!

""To a house with tired windows
In skin exposed to weather""

The poem shows love that only mother can give. Awesome creativity- really like this poem!


Thank you,
Zuzanna

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Mark Niel

Tue 29th Jul 2008 23:24

Thanks Jeff and Janet for your comments. It's always encouraging to find a twist works.

Janet, finding out you're as cool as Lara Croft - what a great day that must have been!

Mark

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Paul F Blackburn

Tue 29th Jul 2008 23:04

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Tue 29th Jul 2008 22:50

I am pleased Louise became the runner up, I am her Mum.She has a way with words.

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 29th Jul 2008 22:48

Hi Mark, great little poem, great twist, nice one Jeff

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Paul F Blackburn

Tue 29th Jul 2008 16:46

Photographs of Pete Crompton by Howard Haigh.
All other photographs by John Togher.

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Paul F Blackburn

Tue 29th Jul 2008 16:26

Photographs by Gemma O'Neill

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Tue 29th Jul 2008 10:04

This is really neat. I like it.
Enid Blyton in the same poem as Lara Croft. Imagine that!

I used to love the famous five books.
There was a poster of Lara Croft in my old shop once. My niece pointed to it and said, "that's you aunty Janet." When i asked what she meant by that, she told me i'm the angel of darkness.
How good is that?
This is what poetry does for me. Evokes feelings and memories, and i love it! xx

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clarissa mckone

Tue 29th Jul 2008 05:06

HI Melissa, Nice song you have here! I do understand the feelings. You are such a dear and sensitive soul, that you think so much and feel so much. I feel the same way at times. hope your well, your friend in poetry Clarissa

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 28th Jul 2008 22:35

Hi Melissa, really identified with the mental torment here, so powerfully written, love the last stanza, thanks and thank you for your comments, Jeff

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Mon 28th Jul 2008 19:37

Hi Gemma

It's a pleasure, I'm so happy you like the poem, hope Chris liks it too.

I love the way you perform your work. I'm there in the poem, carried along by your words.

Lynda x

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 28th Jul 2008 17:14

Hi Antonio, got your finger on the pulse as usual!! Can rely on you for that! He could be okay, will be interesting though whatever, with the black issue, could be a refreshing change from the smarmy Bush!

You can never tell though with a country that votes in Reagan, can't help thinking of spitting image - to Mr Reagan 'What do you think of Gadaffi' - Reagan - 'I just love that little duck!' cheers Jeffarama!

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Gemma Lees

Mon 28th Jul 2008 13:32

Thanks very much for your feedback. I think your poem goes very well with mine, it's so busy sounding, it really gives you the image of people bustling about on a city street. See you next month at Middleton.

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Mark Niel

Mon 28th Jul 2008 13:26

Thanks Darren. I liked your poems too.

This is one of my performance ones in a set of comedy poems. I'm getting a nice reaction to them and trying to submerge the punchlines below the surface is the challenge!

Good luck with all your work too

Regards

Mark

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 28th Jul 2008 13:20

Hi Gemma, great to meet you briefly last night, really liked the 'Bolton' poem. Enjoyed your performance of it too, thats something I'm just learning at the moment!

Enjoyed my first time and appearance at the Old Boars Head and will be there next time.

Enjoyed reading your work on here, love the 'Blackpool Rock' poem brilliant.

The poem I've got on my profile about watching people that I mentioned is in my samples called 'I know you're there'.

If you have a look at that and any others would appreciate your feedback, cheers see ya soon Jeffarama!

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darren thomas

Mon 28th Jul 2008 11:13

Very good. Nice twist. This would work well in performance with several other similar pieces.
Hello, by the way.

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Mon 28th Jul 2008 08:03

Dear Melissa

Please do not despair we still have enough air to breath? Worrying will not get you ahead. I though just to live perhaps more modest and that is good with me. Thought will share my thoughts with you. We are also have difficult time with the cost of living here in Canada. The cost has been increased in all areas, Food and housing is extremely expensive also the Gasoline and here we do not have a proper transportation the one can get from point A to B..

Thank you and be well...Zuzanna

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Sun 27th Jul 2008 20:28

Kids adventures. Aren't they great.
It reminds me of my childhood. Three in a bed, literally. All pretending to be asleep and stifling giggles by trying to make them sound like snores.
Thankyou for the smiley memory :-)
Janet.xx

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Sun 27th Jul 2008 19:53

Hi Jordan. May i make a suggestion?
Drop "again" from the second line and "the" from the last.
Personally, i feel the imagery becomes more profound and wider scale.
Quite a modern uptake on haiku.
Love Janet.x

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Sun 27th Jul 2008 19:39

Whispers of my heart, pour through the ink.
Everything locked inside become words on the page.

These lines say it all Melissa. For most writers i think. Love Janet.xx

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clarissa mckone

Sun 27th Jul 2008 16:37

HI Antonio,
Obama in a way is like a Kennedy, same talk. He is a member of the same clubs as the big familys, such as the tri lateral commision, the on the surface looks like a nice group, but infact is for globalization. The 2 party system was long ago infiltrated by big media and neither party represents the values set out at the founding of the partys or for that matter this country. Many that dwell on the future can see it play out a few ways. one, he could end up like Kennedy, that will set of riots. Two its looking as if we shall end up in another war with Iran, if that happens, we dont have the man power to do it, no draft in place, so it will be with nuks. Now if Bush can do that, lets say there is another "terrorist" attack before the elections, He has the power to cancel the elections, impose martial law.He will get the wars he wants, its a power grab. They have through globalization created a mess, they have made other countrys wealthy, to the point that they have money, nuks,and a need for oil. When oil prices go up, the dollar falls. Not sure why.But enough of all that, we are all watching. Mccain could win, but it would be false election votes.Its a shame really the one man that could have changed it for us, was never given any air time by big media. good write. In my opinion, Obama is a show boat, not enough experience.I all so think he is muslim, and is just not saying so. I hope that Im wrong, I hope it gets better. take care

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Sat 26th Jul 2008 23:53

Dear Melissa

The song or Lyrics is up to date with such wonderful thought provoking lines to the one that comes to read this write. You have captured reality well. It is all over the World now the heaviness of the increasing cost of living and the salary are low. It will bring the World down if this is going to continuous like this. I am not a visionary but anyone can feel the impact of the prices we pay. Very wise write-Thank you foe sharing!

Have a great weekend!

Zuzanna
xx

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Philip Golding

Sat 26th Jul 2008 23:39

Thank you Jeff and Tim for your kinds. My youngest son Jack, agred 9, was my inspiration behind this poem. I was reading to him, in his mums bed when the words came to me. I had to dash to write the basic framework before finishing writing the poem. Thank you Jeff for the ultimate complement of showing your daughter.

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