Really liked this. Did you intend the double meaning of 'survived the fall'? We tend to think of fall as an American term for autumn, but actually it was in use in England in Shakespeare's day & was more usual than autumn.
Thanks for your comments about mine too, I feel I'm making progress - emotionally if not poetically!
Cx

Comment is about Song of the dark 2 (blog)

Aw Antonionioni,
this is a very touching poem for this time of year.

And now our frozen fingers push the gate
into the garden sheltered from the squall.

Beautiful lines, although i do love them all.
Sad aren't I?
'scuse me, this caught me unawares.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Song of the dark 2 (blog)

Much enjoyed. Thought provoking stuff, well crafted and a great listen.

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about Christmas Day 1994 (article)

Hi Winston,
And thanks for your comments on "testament." Much appreciated. I haven't got to grips with posting audio files quite yet, but thanks to help from cjd I seem to be heading in the right direction. I can certainly imagine from reading your "BIG TIME" poem why that Peter Gabriel vid would havce inspired you - one of my favourites too.

Regards

A.E.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

I like it, and its not your normal style that you post for us to read.

Comment is about from beginning to end and back again (blog)

Hi Pete,
Such a wonderful piece but then you know already i love this kind of poetry from you.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about from beginning to end and back again (blog)

Beautiful. And it feels like quite a different style for you? - or perhaps I just haven't read enough of yours yet.
Thanks for the comment about mine too - I feel that my voice is getting stronger (literally as well as metaphorically!) and much of that is thanks to writing it out.
Cx

Comment is about from beginning to end and back again (blog)

good work
with every new demon
I like the idea of a lost love taken by demons, it feels that way, love conjures so much, stirs all of this....all of this, and the hope, how much has happened through hope

I enjoyed this description of your pain and I dont mean it to pleasure in someones pain, I hope you know that, I mean that I feel those things too, and im sure many if not all, I like the way you bring it together, it sounds you are locked in a dungeon of emotion and I'm sure you know that the bolts and the locks won t keep you in for too long

the poem also reminnds of the story of grendel but as written by William Dick of Marillion (the band) aka fish, when he talks of this monster on the rampage for revenge, fuelled by emotions stemming from lost loves im sure.


Peter

Comment is about Splitting (blog)

Thank you Zuzanna and Alan for you comments on my poem, it's much appreciated.

Comment is about Cycling (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Thanks for your comments about 'Daisy'.
I am trying to get audio on myself - I've been told you need a mic and a sound card (which apparently my computer already had) and a free downloadable programme called 'Audacity'. So far I've managed to record well enough but I'm having difficulty converting them to mp3 - do you know anyone who is good with computers (most 5 year olds it seems)?
Good luck!
Cx

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Well, Its an epic work, an one that requires a very deep breath at the start. You have managed to write so much on what is admittedly a big topic, but you have done it without any of the rhymes being forced or the meanings becoming tenuous.Like the shape too. Let's hear it performed. Winston

Comment is about testament (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

nice poem Belinda Alan.

Comment is about Cycling (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Absolutely fantastic. Can you upload it on an audio file? - would sound amazing performed. Reading it I found my heartbeat getting faster & my breath shorter with the rythm - quite uncomfortable but kind of excitingly visceral!
Cx

Comment is about testament (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

You can afford to waste carrots like that in these hard times?!?!
Cx

Comment is about Snow joke (blog)

You old misery guts!!
Gifts in brown paper with a ribbon twist look great, just so long as we keep Gordons picture out of it, and at least you know the words to all those songs which keep cropping up each year.

I'm well used to those pound shops. It's amazing what you find in there.
You can buy a 50 pack of tea-light candles for 99p. Save on electricity. ( hey, that rhymes.)
Janet.x

Comment is about Snow joke (blog)

WOW!!
Great images there and a fantastic shape.
Turn it upside down it could be the bomb about to go off. You could probably even use the same kind of theme in your words.
Great stuff.

ps. I did lose the rhythm a bit in places but then it picked up again.
Janet.x

Comment is about testament (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Thanks Winston..... Just one of my little pleasures
regards
Gus

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

First rate, Pete.. I bet you'll be ranting that out soon out and round!

Comment is about 25 things I dont really need for xmas (blog)

Hi Phil,
i really liked your poem.
Yes i do remember playing in the empty boxes instead of with the expensive gifts they came in.
My siblings lot still do it every year.

Believe it ir not, i've even been to the Christmas eve midnight service, (sober) at my local church for the last few years. Hope to make this years too.
Janet.x

Comment is about Empty Boxes (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hi Alain,
thanks for your reply. Since i sent you a message, a different friend of mine has a brother who's just been diagnosed Aspergers.
Thanks to your information i've been able to point her in the right direction for a better understanding of his condition.
It just shows to me how nothing is ever wasted in this life. I've never been so thankful for being a member of write out loud as i am right now.
Love and light, Janet.x

Comment is about Alain English (poet profile)

Original item by Alain English

1984 Pete?

Hello, by the way!
Janet.x

Comment is about a room under the stairs (blog)

Hi Chris,
I really like this poem. It shows strength and knowing there's a light at the end of the tunnel but still a fair distance to travel.
Lovely, Janet.

Comment is about Crashing Waves Of Despair (blog)

Original item by Chris David

Hi Chris, i think many women and men can relate to this poem.
It left me feeling quite melancholic.
Janet.x

Comment is about Enclosed Open Space (blog)

Original item by Chris David

Bit of a dearth of events in my area - also seems everyone has stopped rhyming for Christmas!
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thank-you! Probably won't get round to reading it aloud - sadly live quite a way from the Manchester area, and also am very nervous about performing my own stuff! - If anybody wants to give it a go for me though - I'd be delighted! - would love to know how it's received. On Pete Crompton's advice I've gone and got a mic - and just as soon as I figure out how the thing works, I'll maybe voice up a piece or two -it's a start!
Thanks again,
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Alain,
There's a friend of mine doing some research into Aspergers. I've directed her to your profile on this site. She'll most likely email you for help.

I've found your blogs extremely interesting to read and very informative.
You're a brave man. I admire that.
Love and light to you, Janet.x

Comment is about Alain English (poet profile)

Original item by Alain English

Very funny Peter!

I find Im missing fruit in the house these days more then anything, esp bananas, Im strange, I like them green, and no other color will do.
Now I hear cherios are very good on plain ice cream. Have not tried it yet.
I will say, I tried the goats milk, paid 4.00 for a small bottle of it.GOD it tasted like a goat. I ran out of my usual, soy milk, and tried the goat in my coffee, I drank half the cup, each time thinking it will get better, and each time making that, little kid yuk face. Ended up down the drain, will say the dogs /not the cats, love the goat milk, so I put some in their food.A list helps me at the grocery store, and I go once a week, big shopping day, fills it all up, boys eat it all up! Loved the poem was funny

Comment is about I can't have my cornflakes and Uri Gellar has dissapeared (blog)

Had just come back from a foray to Sainsburys when I read this (where I did buy cornflakes. And milk. But forgot the cat food - which is what I'd gone for) - I hate shopping. I hate Christmas. And I ain't that wild about Uri Gellar. But thanks for the cheer up - this is fantastic stuff. Think this one should be read aloud though. (Thanks for the advice - also bought a mic, apparently I already have a sound card)
Cx

Comment is about 25 things I dont really need for xmas (blog)

Are you writing here about someone you know? - I saw a documentary couple of days ago, self-filmed video footage of a guy called Ben who was an heroin addict. He was 32 when he died, and his testament left me reeling - this poem kind of reminded me of that desperation. Excellent.
Cx

Comment is about must be dawn (blog)

Hi,
Thanks for your comments - pleased you like one. Completely take your point about enactment rather than exposition - was trying to draw together salt, sweet, bitter - obviously not quite to your taste ( yeah, ok - obvious pun). I shall try and enact ... look out for the headline .... Woman helping police with their enquiries regarding a .....!
Thanks again.
Cx

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Hi Tony... Interesting construction. Challenging to read because of it yet once read through a few times seemed to fit for me. Its a desperate lonely poem and a as such the format seems to reflect the hpelessness of things. (Sorry not describing things very well) but imagine it in a tight da de da de da rhyming couplet. not good I think. Winston

Comment is about Waiting... (blog)

Hi Peter- Do you ever write short poems? Even Satanta sorry Sanata sorry Santana sorry Santa (Got there eventually) would stroodle with that lenthy list. Merry Christmas HoHoHO...

Comment is about 25 things I dont really need for xmas (blog)

Hi Peter

I have listened to your cover version and

Thank you..... a most delightful compliment.

My agent's a bit pissed because of the royalties
clause.....but I've explained that we're almost an item....
Regards always
Gus

Comment is about Doing Things by Gus Jonsson (blog)

Good stuff. Like the way the language was so playful. I could see it go down the slide and on the roundabout.

Comment is about Time to leave the playground (blog)

Great, like something by Paul Coelho.

Comment is about Dream's Calling (blog)

Nice idea simply told.

Comment is about Our Summer (blog)

It should have been really touching but it seemed to me that the attempt to turn it into verse led to using this weird language contruction.

Comment is about Waiting... (blog)

Thanks Steve

Sheepish wry smile back to you too!
:~}
Regards
Gus

Comment is about garside (poet profile)

Original item by garside

Incidentally - I really like your work - Perfect Place & Snow Ghost in particular. Unfinished Masterpiece reminds me of someone in my past - and When I Paint My Masterpiece oddly enough ... !
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi
Thanks for getting back to me ... erm... can't quite remember ....probably SNAFU - it took me a lot to work up courage to post that so comments mean a lot. Thank-you!
Btw - is it generally obvious what SNAFU stands for?
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Very touching, well written. The change of metre in the second stanza gives the impression of the waiting, slow passage of time - good mood change, I thought. I know the feeling of hurting so much, how can he (or maybe for you - she) not feel that through the ether?!
Cx

Comment is about Waiting... (blog)

i remember the film/animation, 'When the wind blows' - this poem reminds me very much of that time - i remember Greenham Common and i.d posters of silouetted jets, smiling and sulking East German guards on the Wall warning that misunderstandings could lead to death.

thanks Peter for this

steve

Comment is about a room under the stairs (blog)

Hi Geraldene, An absolute priviledge to have my poem being considered a similar to Edward Lear and Lennon. To my detriment I am yet to read their work other than Lears 'The Owl and the Pusseycat' . That omition I will remedy

Thank you for your kind words

cheers phil

Comment is about The Yim Yam Tree (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

I like this, for me it provokes images that make me open my mind and see the world differently, through other peoples eyes I guess...

Comment is about a room under the stairs (blog)

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this

Comment is about Dream's Calling (blog)

Lovely poem, this poem for me really builds up to a climax of emotion at the end.

Comment is about A Fish From a Far Off and Tide Turning Ocean (blog)

I really like this poem, I found it full of emotion. The use of powerful, thought provoking images really reaches out to the audience..

Comment is about Dreams (blog)

Hi Sean, A well deserved poem of the month if there ever was one. As the poem develops, so does the story and leads you on an uncomfortable journey charting the desparate final days in Michaels life. Through the eyes of "Dr Davies and I" So many conflicts in this sad offering. Liked the use of medical terms (Even if I didn't understand them)
Best Wishes
Winston

Comment is about Christmas Day 1994 (article)