Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 15:30
The rhythm to this made it flow very well until the very end. Very good piece.?
The word choice also aided greatly.
Comment is about Be better he said (blog)
Original item by MissMarieWritesWords
D.knape! I'm honored! And may I say, that makes one hell of a haiku! Thank you!
wink back!
Comment is about Mae Foreman (poet profile)
Original item by Mae Foreman
John,
This excellent poem brought me to tears as you have confronted a very difficult problem head on with a shocking eloquence. Certain lines impacted on me like jolts out of the blue:
rough lads have their uses....the sort we rely on in war.
easily hurt and never show it
In the army I served with them. They were the best, believe me. This country owes them an enormous debt. This increasing rate of suicide is indicative of a country which no longer cares and so few seem to see it or be bothered by it. Politicians be damned. We lie languid in a self consumed lethargy of indifference.
This poem must be recited, printed and edited for more to see and read and hear.
Good work mate and bless you for this
Keith
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
<Deleted User> (19836)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 15:02
Nothing wrong with rubbish, Don. I aspire to write it myself. Much more entertaining than much of the worthy navel gazing you read on here.
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 14:24
I had never read your sample 'Chain Letter' fully until now. That is funny, to hold up someone else's hopes of a damn message, and then even better - to delete it. You are sly.?
I also have burning bushes in my ears and brimstone in my nose - but you can't see that part. . .
Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)
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Thank you all - Jane, Anya, Taylor, Don, Big Sal.
Comment is about The day it rained (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
Can a spambot answer QA's Big Sal?
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Missing Soul’ by Joanna Halliday (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 13:55
Strength.?
Comment is about "We Should Do This!": A Journey into Poetry (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Both Brian and I we write rubbish
He up there, me down here, what?
Between us we rove round the website
Writing all rubbish and twat
Now don't get me wrong John I like Brian
Writing rubbish and twat is great fun
It might be beyond one's comprehension
But what will be done will be done
?
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 13:40
Congrats, I enjoyed the poem the first time I read it.?
(Anyone else think it would be funny as hell to see a spambot make POTW one of these days, just for the hell of it???)
Please tell me I'm not the only one. . .
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Missing Soul’ by Joanna Halliday (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 13:39
I see improvement with every piece you churn out Jon. Well done on another one. Keep writing.?
Comment is about The day it rained (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
Mon 15th Oct 2018 12:27
overwhelmed
yet under
the influence.
wink.
Comment is about Mae Foreman (poet profile)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Humorous, but it makes a good point Hugh..?
Comment is about A moving experience (blog)
Original item by hugh
Thank you Jacob, David, Jon, Taylor. This is a difficult topic to write about - I am keenly aware of all the private grief and hurt that, sometimes, blights the lives of those left behind - therefore getting the tone right is vital in order to show adequate respect. So, your support helps to convince me that I have got the tone, at least partially, right.
John
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
<Deleted User> (19836)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 11:19
The mind is very powerful...if you feed it positive thoughts you will eventually free yourself from negative forces!!!
Damon you are not alone...someone is always listening!?
Comment is about I drank to fill the emptiness, but the more I drank the emptier I felt (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19836)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 11:12
Something that we all experience. Disturbed sleep, crazed dreams, night thoughts, irrationality it all here and succinctly put.
Well done on POTW Joanna, look forward to reading some more of your work.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Missing Soul’ by Joanna Halliday (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (19836)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 10:14
Congratulations! An exquisite expression of two battling emotions dangerously close! Well Deserved POTW!? Thank you. Jane
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Missing Soul’ by Joanna Halliday (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Alem,
This is a masterpiece of poetry. Your words create in the mind of the reader so much to digest. To read this poem is to be in Ethiopia.
Thank you indeed.
Keith
Comment is about On earth away from earth (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Hope springs eternal in the human breast. These were the words of the poet Alexander Pope and your words follow in his footsteps.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Hope Haiku (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Or maybe not. Perhaps we have less time than we think. In which case I shall lie on my death-bed thinking “I wish I had written more shite like that”!
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks, Don and Brian. Clearly, all three of us are old men with more time on our hands than is good for us!
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
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<Deleted User> (19836)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 08:43
Beautiful and encouraging...There is always hope!??
Comment is about Hope Haiku (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Thank you so much Taylor Crowshaw
Comment is about The Knight's Stall (blog)
Original item by Atri Kundu
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 08:31
A tale
of toil
over tiles
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Your poetry never fails to impress..wonderful Keith..?
Comment is about A Gallery of Memories (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Beautiful Atri thank you for sharing ?
Comment is about The Knight's Stall (blog)
Original item by Atri Kundu
Brian - only when Skype's turned off ?
Comment is about Our Aussie Newsreader Natasha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I live in Ireland where there has always been a high rate of suicide in young men it is heartbreaking. Wonderful poem John. I have been touched by this..my brother took his own life at 26yrs of age. ❤
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Keep fighting Damon you are not alone..?
Comment is about I drank to fill the emptiness, but the more I drank the emptier I felt (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Late night moan of lost love...great line..?
Comment is about Placeholder (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 15th Oct 2018 07:46
Don I hope you don't put your lippy on whilst typing!
Comment is about Our Aussie Newsreader Natasha (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Unbelievably powerful.
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 02:26
If there were ever a topic to write a poem about. . .I guess tragedy does inspire the best in us at the worst of times. Are all these poems you've been putting on the site published in a book of yours? Or have you just letting the muses take you?
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
While you did make a valiant attempt John
To explain the mathematics of your tiles
You buggered up my maths-thinking neurons
Who kept saying this man he's so vile
They tried to keep track of your reasoning
Too much for them, they collapsed, dead, and broke
And ended up cluttering my cranium
In a dead-neuron pile smoldering smoke
(What a useless piece of comment John...)?
Comment is about X2 = ((x – y) * (x + y)) + y2 (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thankyou for all your comments and likes. I'm glad I'm not alone with this. Trouble is my input is greater than my output, having to 'restrict' myself to one a day in order to give you all a chance to look before it 'disappears' into my profile. Ah well, such is life.....
As many of you have indicated I would rather have a drawer full of ideas to draw on than none at all. Which I do. 1" thick pile of 'poems in waiting'. Arghhh......?
Comment is about Do You Share My Problem ? (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thanks Jacob. It exhausted me this one. My children are in their 30s and 20s and they know so many young men who have taken their own lives.
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Big Sal
Mon 15th Oct 2018 00:13
Definitely one of my favorite poems now, John. Well done is not enough to convey the great work you did on this. Damn, I can't be the only one noticing your excellent work here can I? I hope not.
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
No apologies necessary Sal! Criticism is not necessary a bad thing, I do value it. And one can't always hear what they want to hear, right? And you did have a valid point and as a matter of fact your comment helped and I'd happier with the revised version! So, no worries. ?
Comment is about Consume or be Consumed (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
raypool
Mon 15th Oct 2018 16:16
The frightening thing to me John is how common is depression - even if you are sound of mind and limb - there are now many artificial substitutes that offer us a panacea, but when the glitz has gone what's left? Is it perhaps an answer that lies with emotional and financial security? Both rare commodities it seems to me.
Powerful and persuasive poem , great stuff.
Ray
Comment is about The flowers of the forest (blog)
Original item by John E Marks