Jason,
This has to be one of your best poems to date as it boldly announces that summer is gone and the heat of the sun must now be replaced by the lighting of fires. A very descriptive piece. I enjoyed this
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about Hallows Harbinger (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thankyou commenters
Thankyou likes too
Thankyou for reading
My life screened to you
You see I'm quite happy
Emotion times 10
I would not change it
If given chance again......
Comment is about Explains My Person (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Ghazala Lari
Wed 2nd Oct 2019 03:56
Thought provoking poem. The point directly made, comparisions reasonable. A piece where we can have our own answers. This is exactly how an intelligent write can wake up the sleeping crowd to a reasoning mode.
Regards,
G.L
Comment is about To The Subject of Every Photo Taken Before 1900 (blog)
Original item by Michael Triandam
Why did they never smile in old photographs? Or rather, why do they always smile nowadays? We can't delve back into a mentality that we can never know. Just a heap of questions and few answers. A photo hints at much and tells so little. I think this poem captures that. Nice work, do you have Greek ancestry BTW?
John Short
Comment is about To The Subject of Every Photo Taken Before 1900 (blog)
Original item by Michael Triandam
It's partner (the right sock)
Does this have a hole?
I guess would embarrass
To include in prize bowl
PS Always (almost) respond as enjoy your work and it is highly respondable...if you get my drift ?
Comment is about Cold Front (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Poets you lot
You're off with the pixies
Leave it to us
We guarantee fixies
We sit on our thrones
In charge of all things
We'll patch the world up
Repair all these dings
Your shit, politicians
Your full of shit greed
Like all the rest of us
A shit greed-like breed
Although I am cynical
I believe it's the truth
What more can I say?
As Aussie, shit strewth!
While comfort it may be
Hanging out for the pollies
To solve all our problems
They spout wafflepolly
I've said it before
And I'll say it again
It needs a mass movement
(Strong leader to lead....)
Thankyou Rose for the first two lines of last verse.
I think change will only come about from a mass movement of people rising up (with a strong leader) to 'force' politicians into the wishes of the people. The recent protests on climate change by young ones around the world is a start. Yes?
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Wed 2nd Oct 2019 00:52
thanks Don
you are the only one responding
you win the prize
one black sock
(you provide the foot.)
Comment is about Cold Front (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Count yourself lucky John. Properties here with rivers flowing over their back gardens are out of my price bracket......
Must look for that CD Trevor.......
Comment is about NO OTHER WAY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Do you mean the one in the post about rogering old biddies, Brian, or the one in the comment about careening my van down the M1 at 60mph?
And thanks for the”Like”, Trevor.
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I love rainy days too. And the River Aire now flows over my back garden. It’s timeless.
Comment is about NO OTHER WAY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 1st Oct 2019 23:44
John
Your last sentence has put the fear of God into me. I was very cautious before...now I'm terrified!!!
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I feel the same, MC, that the years of my youth seemed far simpler times. But I wonder if this is the perspective of the aged? Will my kids, for instance, look back in 40 years time at their lives as they are today and see them as “far simpler times”?
And I have to say that, on balance, I support the protection of sites like Stonehenge through restricted access. English Heritage’s on-site educational support is extremely good too.
What does perplex me though on the aspect of caravanning is that I along with others am allowed to lug one at 60mph on public roads with no instruction or validation of my competence.
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
It is encouraging to hear of all these national events. In my small town of 5000 souls there will be readings given by local people of their poems in the local public library. It has become an annual event and well attended.
Keith Jeffries
Comment is about To tell the Truth, it's National Poetry Day! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Jennifer,
Thank you for your comment. The real culprits are those whose appetite for money knows no bounds; big business and their lapdogs the politicians.
Keith
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Jennifer,
Thank you for your comment. Not too late, but I do rather feel like an autumn bloom.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Daylight Robbery (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I lived in Wiltshire back in the fifties and as a youth managed a good
number of bike trips around that under-estimated county. In those
days places like Stonehenge were free of the tourist label, charges
and protective barriers. Happy, more innocent, less confined and
regulated days, despite the comparatively recent turmoil of war,
Looking back, how glad I am that I was young then - when we seemed to have the world at our feet and took so much joy from
simple pleasures.
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
It surely harks back to the safety of the cave that our ancestors took
refuge in, watching the elements strut their stuff from the security of its warm (ish!) dry habitat.
Comment is about NO OTHER WAY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wow!!!!!!!!! Really impressive
Jennifer
Comment is about Lead Me Not (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Agree with the atmosphere being really present in the poem. I like autumn as well, but have noticed most people don't. In Italy the summers are often uncomfortably hot, so autumn is a relief, sunny and warm but heat not a problem. There are also chestnuts, the olives, porcini mushrooms, and new wine and olvie oil as consolation!
Jennifer
Comment is about Drawing in.... (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Sad one this - conformity is often, as you say, stifling. Surely it isn't too late to recover something of what you feel is your real, authentic self?
Jennifer
Comment is about Daylight Robbery (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Liked this one. They've been telling us for the last 20 years that if we went on as we were, and are doing, it would come to a point where the situation would no longer be reversable. Trump even refuses to acknowledge the problem.
Jennifer
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I can't think of anything more comforting than wearing an item of clothes from a loved one. Here in the UK we are buying 30% more clothes than 10 years ago, some fast fashion items have a life of only 3 weeks before going into land fill.....and six year olds in developing countries are working 14 hour days to pick the cotton to feed our avarice.
The fabric of society
Our earth is held together
And yet is torn apart,
By spider webs of commerce
With neither soul nor heart.
We buy cheap clothes in Britain
And claim material needs
Whilst in Bangladesh and India
Children suffer for our greed.
The leisure wear we chill in
Comes at a heavy price
As youngsters toil for fourteen hours
Their leisure sacrificed.
Fast fashion’s what they call it,
It’s here and then…. it’s gone,
Made with cotton picked by infants,
In the cruel, blazing sun.
It’s the must-have £8 hoodie,
it’s the bargain £1 tee
Produced by wage-slave labour
In those hell hole factories,
Where workers live and eat and sleep
So desperate to be free ,
There are none so blind
As don’t want to see.
I’ve only got one body and just one set of feet
I don’t need twenty T-Shirts to make my life complete,
Or 3 more sets of trainers or 10 more pairs of shoes,
They call it fast fashion…. I call it lose- lose.
So beneath my cotton duvet, a soft pillow at my head
I reflect on all the children - cold hard floors for beds,
Asleep beneath machines with their life stealing beats,
Can we join hands and fight fast fashion on our streets?
Comment is about 'Those tokens I harvested from her deathbed are more like the pearl' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Philipos,Don and Rose,
Thank you for your interest and comments. However, I do think it is too late. The political leaders will either ignore or procrastinate.
Keith
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks Kevin, I do think it sounds better the way Graham was saying, but I also believe that you catch the thought as it's thrown, so to speak. Thanks though mate, much appreciated.
J. x
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
No, actually I really like that Graham. I'm one of those that does edit a bit but wouldn't change a whole poem once it's written, but I have to say, you're absolutely right.
I'll take that on board for future, and can I also say thank you for some constructive criticism, it genuinely helps.
J. x
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
I can see where Graham is coming from, but I think it reads equally well either way.
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Immediately brought to mind the old urban legend....
https://darwinawards.com/legends/legends1998-09.html
Comment is about The Smellyphant (blog)
Original item by hugh
Thanks for this, MC. We traveled the A303 when we visited Stonehenge a couple of weeks ago. You’d need a mortgage to get in there now but membership of English Heritage got us in free.
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thunder: I have a CD of theirs.....
Sometimes nice to watch the rain running down the window from a nice warm room.
Comment is about NO OTHER WAY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Philipos
Tue 1st Oct 2019 16:38
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 1st Oct 2019 16:28
I hope these driverless gizmos have a bumper, Ruth if so I'm going to buy a towrope and have a free ride, but knowing my bloody luck I'll probably hitch on to one that is on a long journey ( depending on battery power )
best have a packed bag with me just in case ?
Rose ?
Comment is about Invisible Driver (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 1st Oct 2019 16:22
said it before, saying it again, we are nearing the door of the last chance saloon, and thats if we are lucky!
keep the reminders coming, Keith, perhaps someone will take note.
Rose ?
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Shades of Edward Lear. Fun!
P.S. Unsure about the keepers - wouldn't they have BEEN thwarted by the problem until they latched on to the fruit cure? :-)
Comment is about The Smellyphant (blog)
Original item by hugh
Another welcome chuckle from this always dependable source of
entertainment, information and discourse (yes, I said DIS-course!).
I had a static caravan on a coastal site in Devon (county of birth
where numerous relations still live) and enjoyed it for the sheer
convenience of being able to pack up the car and get out of town
whenever I felt the need for a change and the pleasures of the seaside with all its old memories. I wouldn't go for the sort that
gets towed.(being stuck behind one on the A303 has never been my idea of fun!)..and would probably settle for a VW caravanette or similar instead, but I readily recognise the appeal of instant
travel of a self-contained nature that is on hand at any time.
There's a special freedom that appeals -
The sort that comes equipped with wheels!! ?
Comment is about ADULTS ONLY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I bumped into the front of
A girl expecting warm
Instead it was a cold front
Strange....this ain't the norm ?
Comment is about Cold Front (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Tue 1st Oct 2019 12:35
call 'em cold fronts-
we call 'em Blue Northers.
Comment is about Cold Front (blog)
Original item by d.knape
This is a really clever piece of work Jason. Repetitive poems can be very effective but have you tried reading it using the "take my' words only every other line.
"Take my hand, I broke it forging chains that bind me, my head, I broke on the Jagged rocks"
I think it reads better that way imho only go course.
Nice work.
Graham
Comment is about Broken (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
You honour me with your rhyme
and that you took the time.
So now from this yank
to you
my gratitude, thanks, Hugh!
e. xxx
Comment is about instead (blog)
Original item by Eiren Water
Great poem,short but full of meaning and that last line I'm lost for words.Oops no I have found some .
They're doing cartwheels in my head,
Moving words I should have said.
Under my pillow they do creep,
Constant reminders,disturbing sleep.
Smothered words I should have said,
Doing cartwheels in my head.
Comment is about instead (blog)
Original item by Eiren Water
Do.
But hey? I'm quite happy
Happy eh wot.....?
Comment is about Explains My Person (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thank you so much, John and Adriana, for your comments. It means so much to me.
e. xxx
Comment is about instead (blog)
Original item by Eiren Water
I empathize with your Monday blues
But please Chrystel don't send them south
That's not what she meant......
Oh?.....?
Comment is about Monday blues (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Nice rhyming there Ruth......No driverless car is 100% foolproof as shown by a couple of accidents to date. I don't like them Encourages laziness.....
Comment is about Invisible Driver (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Hello? what's that car I see?
Zooming past my eyes
No heads are peeping up in it
I wonder, yes, do I?
Don't know where this is going......
But jolly car is havin' fun
Spinning, doing burns
Hello? a cop's just ticketed it
Silly car won't learn
Attention driverless car owners:
Train them properly to obey road rules and not do burnouts.....?
Comment is about Invisible Driver (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I don't give a damn
God what you tell me
I'll have it, right now
(And bugger the rest......)
I'll take what I want
Cos I'm the best dressed
What's that you are saying?
The planet I've messed)?
Don't know what you're talking about?......
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
A good honest piece of writing tinged with humour
Keith
Comment is about Explains My Person (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Philipos
Tue 1st Oct 2019 08:33
Yes, I'm with you every inch of the way Keith. The earth doesn't belong to just once species as in human kind. Other aspects, creatures, plants, and trees etc - they have to be considered too. What are we like us humans always over fishing our resources. ?
Comment is about A Green Planet (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thankyou for the likes and MC. If you suffer this painful problem I hope you are able to find a nearby clinic.......?
Comment is about Tongue-in-Cheeker (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
keith jeffries
Wed 2nd Oct 2019 08:53
Don,
Well written and with good humour but I would rather have a sedan chair.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Waymo, Skippy and Driverless Car Week (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews