Thanks Jennifer for your memories and thoughts, you seem to have an endless supply of responses to what I write, such a lift to the spirits I have to say. One of the few pleasures and a comfort to the troubled soul too.
Ray
Comment is about PIPE DREAMS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Suzy Miller
Sun 29th Sep 2019 16:41
Hello Clare
I would like to include your poem in my presentation for a TedX and wanted to get written confirmation that I could use your poem Weapons (and credit you of course) during my talk.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Best wishes
Suzy Miller
07525059634
suzy@startingovershow.com
Comment is about Clare Kirwan (poet profile)
Original item by Clare Kirwan
It just seems appropriate to add -
If you're eager to share
Be as eager to take care! ?
Comment is about My SEND Problem (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Lovely yet again. The complicity between the pipe and the smoker is so well expressed. It keeps the smoker company. My father smoked a pipe, and the yellow tobacco, in a special pouch, had a fantastic scent. (I gave up smoking at 8, yes eight. Having smoked several of those small packets of Players, and even her father's cigars, with a friend, we decided there was nothing in it for us)!
Jennifer
Comment is about PIPE DREAMS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I'm hopeful this is beneficial for WOL
purposes of the imagination being invigorated and inspired beyond the parameters of humdrum existence. Poetry has long been a remedial resort for the
mind and has produced results for both writer and reader alike. The likes of Blake
and Clare come to mind. Let the magic of words make their presence felt to allow
the mind to take us on a journey in this life. It is the least we can do and we owe it to each other via that gift of life..
Comment is about Untitled (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
Fascinating! It's always a surprise to find a canal in the depths of a town, as Graham says, it's difficult to imagine how busy they would have been when built. Especially liked the first three lines. A lot of people go cancycling along an unused, but well kept canal where I live.
Jennifer
Comment is about BY THE CANAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you for the feedback everyone, Brian, I think you're absolutely right about those lines.
Comment is about Burn (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
Really enjoyable! What if their politicians were even worse than ours? Can hear Wol members shouting 'Not poss'.
Jennifer
Comment is about WHEN THE ALIENS COME (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Great writing Ray! One turns on the news and hears that yet another conflict has started, often in a part of the world where the people have very little even in times of peace. Liked 'in the crow's nest of my life'.
Jennifer
Comment is about TAKING SIDES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Brian has a fair comment to make about "strict" (or not) rhyme. His
own lines seem well constructed in the context of the poem. I enjoyed the repeat of "ish" in the chosen words to maintain the theme and the rhythm.
Comment is about Burn (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
Great, really interesting, review Greg. I wish I had been there, seeing the world in a grain of Bognor sand.
Comment is about Blakefest, Bognor Regis, 2019 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Scribbling and scrambling
The words
I've heard
Dabbling into
Poetry
Comment is about Haiku – Dribble Drabble (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thankyou Adriana - every so often rhyme and message meld together beautifully, as they did in this extract.
Comment is about Addicted. So.... (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Do.
Impressed with your Deep Thinkingness
You've plumbed the Deep Think Sea
Now let me add a Deep Thought line
'One you'll never see'
You've jumped upon a merry-go-round
And scratched your head with art
Drib-drabbled round the edges and
Attempted haiku start
Very good. Do will be impressed....
Lotta deep thinking needed.....
Really just dribble drabble.....
Don't tell Do.....?
Comment is about Haiku – Dribble Drabble (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I like your sample Chloe. Simple and succint. The rhyming is also good....
Comment is about Chloé (poet profile)
Original item by Chloé
Thank you Do.RoThY, Appreciate your beautiful comment.
Comment is about I know (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
Thank you, Ian. So appreciate you reading my work.
Comment is about I know (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
Chloe you have gotta
Check spelling prior to SEND
Like I've chekked my spelling here
Spellcheck I recomend....?
You still got spelling errors....
Wot? I double checked it....
Chloe won't be impressed.
Comment is about My SEND Problem (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I'm learning art of Haiku
How to deeply think
Not to make my readers think
I've got a missing link
But you have......
Wot?
Comment is about Haiku – Dribble Drabble (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I do this all the time ?very relatable ! Good work
Comment is about My SEND Problem (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thankyou for all your comments and likes.
Comment is about Addicted. So.... (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Ghazala Lari
Sun 29th Sep 2019 05:14
If you allow me, can I save your poem in my comment box as well as in my blog entry on relationships with all due credit to you for your write?
Thanks n regards.
Comment is about Relationships,inspired by Ghazala Lari (blog)
Original item by hugh
Ghazala Lari
Sun 29th Sep 2019 05:14
This is really beautiful and meaningful. Thank you for this wonderful work. I appreciate your thoughts.?
Comment is about Relationships,inspired by Ghazala Lari (blog)
Original item by hugh
<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 28th Sep 2019 23:30
I personally don't have an issue with with the said rhyme, but if a strict rhyme is needed what about...
And as the smoke clears and my lash-outs diminish
I find myself alone again and wish my life would finish
Comment is about Burn (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
I cannot think of a better description of this than MC's : 'A powerful message of emotional confusion.' As a rhymer I am also jarred by subside/die but the best I can do is dry/die, still not the most satisfactory. Perhaps something needs changing with these two lines as all the others rhyme perfectly....
Comment is about Burn (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
Hi Ray, thanks for comments on El Dorado: dodgy is in there, best
Dom.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks so much. Appreciate your lovely comments.
Comment is about A morning kiss (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
Thank you so much. Appreciate your comments.
Comment is about Ancient love (blog)
Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)
A review that sets the taste buds flowing in desire to learn more of Kerry's work. Thank you.
Comment is about Distance Sweet on my Tongue: Kerry Darbishire, Indigo Dreams (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
There's magic in your rhyming Ruth,
The truth and nothing but the truth.
The flow of words is a special treat,
To the readers we randomly meet,
Comment is about Ordinary Magic (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I don't know, Don, in general the roots are pretty gnarly.
Comment is about Being and Ridiculousness (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
A powerful message of emotional confusion. The use of rhythm in
the lines appeals to the songwriter in yours truly, although it sometimes goes off-balance along the way. I am a devotee of rhyme
and as such would have sought something to chime with either
subside or die, according to preference. But that's just me! Good one!
Comment is about Burn (blog)
Original item by Gunnar Payn
Enjoyed the sound of this..visions of Michael Douglas...or Leo DiCaprio
Let's meet
On wall street
And howl
With those wolves!
Comment is about Stock Market (blog)
Original item by d.knape
I Don't seem to be notified of messages and responses as I did when I first joined, so please accept my apologies for any delays in responding back to you.
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Nigel i have just wrote a poem about the spell snow white was under ?
Comment is about Ordinary Magic (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Ha,ha Don, Nigel I'm lovin' how this poem has swerved you both on to a totally different train of thought...but it's getting your thinking cogs a movin'
Comment is about Wake up (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
The girls will take one look
and maybe have a crush
then all rush at once
at big naked Don!
Comment is about Wake up (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
When reading this poem
it puts me under
a special magic spell - - -
one I don't want to
ever come to an end.
Comment is about Ordinary Magic (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I am truly delighted to read this story of a young man who would have gone unnoticed, as so many do, in what is called the third world, who has a fine intellect which can now be given full rein. May his future be richly blessed.
Comment is about Award-winning poet Ocean Vuong wins $625,000 'genius grant' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
But Ruth I like my comfort zone
It's cozy, comfy, cush
Don't wanna come out be exposed
I got no clothes on (hush)
I'll have the girlies panting
Because I got no pants
This would be an utter shame
I can't come out, I can't.....
Comment is about Wake up (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I'm loving this Jack and his Jill Ruth
I'll show it by wagging my tail
Not partial to Little Jack Horner
Get read Ruth I'm 'bout to wail
waillllll......?
Maybe the look was puzzlement?.... She's lost the plot. Woof.....
Comment is about Teacher's pet is a big hit in school (blog)
Original item by hugh
I got me some mescalin Randy
Then stared long and hard at this root
It opened its mouth and then uttered
You stupid you silly old coot
How rude Randy.......
Maybe I picked the wrong root?....
Comment is about Being and Ridiculousness (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
Thanks for that link. When I want some crabs for company I now know what to do.....
Comment is about Being and Ridiculousness (blog)
Original item by Randy Horton
Thanks for the observation Keith. Even for aliens that would be a tough call I fear. I'm pleased you enjoyed it - that's all I would ask.
The alien as a metaphor is a good one Brian. Political cartoons I like, especially Gerald Scarfe!
Jon and Vautaw thanks for stopping by.
Ray
Comment is about WHEN THE ALIENS COME (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Really enjoyed this Tom, the concept of poems being like past reflections. There is actually a New Moon tonight so make yourself some wishes.
Comment is about Lunar (blog)
Original item by Tom
raypool
Sun 29th Sep 2019 21:20
Nice to see you liking this Jennifer. I wanted to personalize the canal hence the lines that kick it off. I tend as you know to write short poems as I run out of options quite quickly, and end up with vignettes.
Ray
Comment is about BY THE CANAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool